2090: A Branch of Burden – Chapter Six, Part Two

Title: A Branch of Burden
Author: Ravager Animas
Media: Video Game
Topic: Etrian Odyssey
Genre: Adventure/Friendship
URL: Chapter Six
Critiqued by SC

Hello, and welcome back to “A Branch of Burden,” by Ravager Animas! I’m your host, SC, and last time, we discussed at length the various reasons for the various issues I noted throughout the riff. We also discussed at length how the samurai classes of Etrian Odyssey went from being boring glass cannons to glass cannons that wear all the adornments, but that’s largely irrelevant to the riff at large. There was also a big ol’ fight scene which culminated in Little Miss Landsknecht ripping a frog limb from limb, which was metal as hell.

This week, we’re gonna be finishing up chapter six so that I can move on to the last chapter and put this riff to bed, so let’s not waste anymore time!

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2085: The Shadow Warriors – Chapter 15

Title: The Shadow Warriors
Author: Shadow knight1121
Media: Comics
Topic: Justice League
Genre: Crime/Mystery
URL: Chapter 15
Critiqued by BatJamags (GoodJamags)

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another installment of The Shadow Warriors!

Last time, we finished up the chapter really early, so that was great fun. Oh, and something probably happened in the story, too.

Chapter 15: A New Villain

I’m sure he’ll be well thought-out and interestingly characterized.

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How to Not End Up in the Library: On the Care and Feeding of Outlines

So, as I write this, SC wasn’t able to get a riff in on time, so I’m thinking maybe we can turn things like these into a pool of potentially useful filler for when a normal post can’t go up and there are no guest riffs to fill the spot. Basically, though, we talk a whole lot about what not to do when writing on this website, but we don’t spend as much time addressing what to do. As such, we’re doing some writing advice posts. The other Librarians are still working out what they’ll write about, but I’m taking the lead with something I’m pretty good at: outlining and narrative structure.

One of my catchphrases when riffing or commenting (along with “FUCKING BLUSHERS!” “That’s not how [X] works,” “Bow chicka bow wow,” and “Bullshit.”) is “Outline your shit.” Most of those are for comedic effect, but outlining is one of the most important parts of writing.

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2080: The Shadow Warriors – Chapter 14

Title: The Shadow Warriors
Author: Shadow knight1121
Media: Comics
Topic: Justice League
Genre: Crime/Mystery
URL: Chapter 14
Critiqued by BatJamags (GoodJamags)

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another installment of The Shadow Warriors!

Last time, we learned that the best part of the story, Sarina Gibson, was in fact not the creation of our illustrious author, and I promised that I’d read the original story to see how much of her character arc is actually original. As it turns out, the author actually put a bare minimum of effort into this. The original story, Just for Laughs, is kind of mediocre (not a bad read, but somewhat lacking in pacing and technical ability) and the whole thing takes place inside Arkham Asylum. Basically the only thing that Shadow knight1121 directly reused was the recording that revealed everything. I’m not sure whether it explains some of the bizarre lengths Sk1121 goes to in order to keep the Dork Patrol involved, or makes it that much more confusing. Regardless, Sk1121 is still relying largely on someone else’s concept to make his story interesting, so no redemption cookies for him.

Oh, and I just saw that Sarina’s author has another fic (the original was based on Arkham Asylum, while this one is just Batman, and seems to reset the continuity) which is weirdly much better than the original despite only having been written eight months later. That one actually never got as far as the revelation, and it was last updated in 2016, so it’s safe to say that Sk1121 wasn’t ripping off that one either. It’s called Laughing All the Way.

Now, let’s get back to it, shall we?

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2074: Realm of the New God – Chapters 8-10

Title: Realm of the New God
Author: ThatoneSelfInsertGuy
Media: Video Game
Topic: Fire Emblem
Genre: Self Insert
URL: Chapters 8, 9, and 10
Critiqued by Zues Killer Productions

Realm of the New God riff part 4-how to make pregnancy edgy

Welcome back to the Realm of the New God riff. Last time, we read about Noah, our main character, experiencing a wired crisis of sorts after a vastly over inflated Medieval Army gets hosed down, and then thrilled in wonder as Frederick Ricken and Donnel, along with a guard, ultimately die so that the main character can get edgy.

Also, Lissa is revealed to be pregnant with Frederick’s child. Now normally, this would mean I skip most of the chapter. But since this is something that’s kind of important, as a royal heir may be in the making, I’m going to guess this becomes important.

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2073: The Shadow Warriors – Chapter 13

Title: The Shadow Warriors
Author: Shadow knight1121
Media: Comics
Topic: Justice League
Genre: Crime/Mystery
URL: Chapter 13
Critiqued by BatJamags (GoodJamags)

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another chapter of the fic that’s making me realize that seventy chapters is too many chapters. Let’s get started, shall we?

Chapter 13: One Thing left to do

Leave poor Ben alone!

Authors Note: Okay I should have mentioned this last chapter but most of the writing at the end I got from Tonycakes story Just for Laughs.

 You… “got it” from the story? What do you mean by that?

I’ll be back soon.

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2068: Maya and Raider Chapter 11

Title: Maya and Raider
Author: 
Eclipsepheniox
Media: 
Video Game
Topic: 
Borderlands
Genre: 
Adventure/Romance
URL: Chapter 11
Critiqued by Delta XIII and BatJamags

D: Well, the plans I had for a Reader Submission Riff mostly fell through, but there is a silver lining here: this will instead be a collab riff between myself and Batjamags. So there’s that.

D: Also, this is (at time of writing), the halfway point of the fic!

D: Anyway, without further delay:

EVERYTHING WRONG

WITH

Maya and Raider

Chapter 11

(insert joke here)

Sorry about the long delay

B: EP thinks fanfiction is posted on a schedule. (1)

but I went to Scotland

B: EP inflicted himself on an unsuspecting sub-country? EP is a dick to Scotlands. (2)

and my cat had to be put down

B: Someone thought it was a good idea to give EP a cat. Poor thing. (3)

and college just started.

B: EP got into college. (4)

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