2562: Sweet Disaster — One-Shot, Part 3

Title: Mass Effect: The First War
Author: HeiKitsune
Media: Video Game
Topic: Halo
Genre: Romance/”Humor”
URL: The Entire ‘Fic
Critiqued by AdmiralSakai

Hello hello all you patrons, and welcome back to the second half of Sweet Disaster, which is proving to be not at all sweet but indeed pretty damn disastrous.

Last time, Lady ‘Kalmon Filter’s dad wandered into the unclearly-explained facility where Nakastura lives, and raged around a bunch because he couldn’t find his daughter, but then she showed up and was all “BECUZ I LUV HIM!!!!” and that calmed her old man down somehow. Also Nakastura and his sister routinely beat up the Marines under their command for really no reason. And that was about it.

This story is sliding into nothing-fic territory incredibly quickly, and if I’d known that going in instead of assuming it’d all be as ridiculous as the first scene I don’t think I’d’ve riffed it. After all, if I wanted to read more edgy imbeciles screaming about nothing much while the plot grinds to a halt to accommodate them, I’d’ve just kept on with First War.

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2557: Sweet Disaster — One-Shot, Part 2

Title: Sweet Disaster
Author: HeiKitsune
Media: Video Game
Topic: Halo
Genre: Romance/”Humor”
URL: The Entire ‘Fic
Critiqued by AdmiralSakai

Hello hello all you patrons, and welcome back to the second half of Sweet Disaster, which is proving to be not at all sweet but indeed pretty damn disastrous.

Last time, we were treated to an extended interlude involving the hangover of one “Kane Nakamura”, an edgy UNSC employee of unclear rank or section who has a variety of accents, ‘nanomachines’ in his blood, and a cybernetic arm that even Freddy Kruger is looking at and being like “Dude, chill with the random knives on everything”. He woke up in bed with a horny Elite named “Lady ‘Kalmon”, who apparently lives next the base they are apparently on, and had apparently completely trashed Nakastura’s room the night before. Not a lot actually happened after that other than Nakastura’s disturbingly-sexualized half sister (who is some kind of a captain) showing up in his room and cursing him out for the whole “slept with Lady Kalman Filter” thing, and apparently Daddy Kalman Filter is wandering around outside breaking stuff.

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2553: Sweet Disaster — One-Shot, Part 1

Title: Sweet Disaster
Author: HeiKitsune
Media: Video Game
Topic: Halo
Genre: Romance/”Humor”
URL: The Entire ‘Fic
Critiqued by AdmiralSakai

Hello hello all you patrons! Today we continue my vacation from The First War with yet another ‘fic from my Massive Pile of Hideous Fem!Elite Halo ‘Fics, in this case the… appropriately-titled “Sweet Disaster” by some random dude(?) with a RWBY OC as his avatar and a whopping one-hundred-and-seven ‘fics on his profile. Most of them are dubious anime-focused shipfics, which apparently he got paid for since the majority of his profile page is an advertisement to take commissions at 0.01 cents per word (or possibly 0.03 cents per word, depending on where on the page you are looking).

This one, though, appears to be a self-motivated effort.

Unfortunately.

I would have paid him 0.05 cents per word to delete every trace of it so that I never have to deal with it again.

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2516: Emay and her Nightmar before Christmas – Chapters 3 & 4

Title: Emay and her Nightmar before Christmas
Author: crazyone256
Media: Movie
Topic: NIghtmare before Christmas
Genre: Romance/Humor
URL: Chapter 3
URL: Chapter 4
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Happy New Year, dear Patrons! I hope everyone who celebrated is sufficiently recovered by now, because I have the last two chapters of fic to serve up.

In the first two chapters we were introduced to Emay, a formless nekomimi with a terrible case of Melodramatic Teenager Syndrome, who has just moved into a gigantic house with a pumpkin patch full of monsters and skeletons under the living room.

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There was also a dumbwaiter involved, because reasons.

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That was basically it, I think. To the fic!

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2512: Emay and her Nightmar before Christmas – Chapters 1 & 2

Title: Emay and her Nightmar before Christmas
Author: crazyone256
Media: Movie
Topic: NIghtmare before Christmas
Genre: Romance/Humor
URL: Chapter 1
URL: Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

Generic greetings, dear Patrons! I hope everyone has had a pleasant Winter Celebration Season. I have one more little fic that I thought I would pull out before the end of the year, because it is quite short. And also because it’s an absolute grammatical train-wreck.

Let’s take a look at the summary, shall we?

This is for my sister so please no flames. Rating’s may change

Well, that was … terse. Now, on to the fic!

Co-Hi I’m doing this for my sis so please no flames.

I’m feeling a sense of something like I’ve seen this before.

Prelog

…Do you mean ‘prologue’? Because you’re not even close.

Emay Pov.

:eye-twitch:

And there’s a POV Tag. Awesome. This is already ticking a lot of boxes for me and we haven’t even gotten to the fic proper yet.

There is a place out their ware there are…. Seven doors.

Are these doors wares because they are for sale? Is Bats’ cleaning out his garage or something?

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