1942: Betrayal – Chapter Six

Title: Betrayal
Author: Darksakudragon
Media: Anime
Topic: Naruto
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: Chapter Six
Critiqued by Lyle

Happy New Year, lovelies!  *holds up a wine glass in a toast*  Welcome back to “Betrayal!”  Are you ready to start this year with a metric ass-load of gibberish? No?

Too bad.

Last time on this disaster, the entirety of Konoha hung out in Sakura’s apartment and got attacked by Female Demon Puss in Boots.  Sakura and the other cat, which was supposed to be a neko-girl but the author forgot this while writing, hung out in a tree.  Author’s notes continued to be pointlessly prolific.

*raises glass again*  Strap in, lovelies.  Here we go!

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1898: Betrayal – Chapter Five

Title: Betrayal
Author: Darksakudragon
Media: Anime
Topic: Naruto
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: Chapter Five
Critiqued by Lyle

Hello, lovelies!

*flounces into the room with a giant mug of eggnog in her grip*

Welcome back to Betrayal!  And speaking of betrayals, all my helpers abandoned me this week when they found out I’d be doing this fic instead of PB:LiW.  As I’m on my own, I figured I’d need some foritifcation to make it through.

*sits down in her chair and sets the mug on the desk before pulling a bottle of Fireball Whiskey from her desk drawer*

This should do it!

*adds a generous glug to her eggnog then takes a big swig from her mug*

Ah yessssss.

Now that I’m ready to go, let’s recap.  Sakura encountered a couple of demon children and they all exited the forest into the forest, while Naruto et al ate ramen and then went to… someone’s… house.  Sakura may or may not have teleported into the scene to hit Naruto.  The details are about as muddled as the author’s notes are prolific.

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1836: Betrayal – Chapter Four

Title: Betrayal
Author: Darksakudragon
Media: Anime
Topic: Naruto
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: Chapter Four
Critiqued by Lyle and Koori

Hello, everyone!  Happy Monday and welcome back to Betrayal.  Last time we went through this fic, a lot of cracked-out stupid happened.  There was something about Sakura summoning her demon creature who may or may not have killed Ino and then ate her.  Neji was overpowered by Sakura and then everyone had a party in the hospital while Neji admitted to Sakura kissing him.  This is a bid deal because blue.

I’ve been under the weather lately, so hopefully this chapter doesn’t kill me.  Let’s do it.

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1793: Betrayal – Chapter Three

Title: Betrayal
Author: Darksakudragon
Media: Anime
Topic: Naruto
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: Chapter Three
Critiqued by Lyle Koori and Lina

Koori:  Hello everyone!  Miss Lyle is at work today – and tomorrow for that matter – in order to get a five-day weekend that starts on Friday, we will be handling the riff today.

Lina:  A five-day weekend would just be a week off, there, Perky.

Koori:  Not listening!  So last time on this piece of crap, there was a confrontation of sorts between Sakura and a bunch of ANBU that aren’t actually ANBU.  Bascially, the author just name-dropped enough of the main characters to try to appear as if she’s actually seen the show or read the manga.  By the end of the chapter, Sakura summoned something.

Lina:  Don’t forget about the copious author’s notes scattered throughout this thing, too.  Those have been as much fun as pulling teeth.

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1775: Betrayal – Author’s Note and Chapter Two

Title: Betrayal
Author: Darksakudragon
Media: Anime
Topic: Naruto
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: Chapter One
Critiqued by Lyle

Hello, lovelies!  After some consideration (not a whole lot, mind you, just some) I’m dropping SONIC HIGH SCHOOL.  It was sapping my will to live and just wasn’t funny anymore.  So good riddance to the trollfic.  Let’s get back to the crackfic I’m doing, instead!

Last time, Sakura ran into Ino, who was turned into a moss-covered cat.  Ino told Sakura that she has a demon inside of her and then Sakura fake-exploded, the author threw a random-ass note into the middle of the fic explaining that Sakura didn’t actually explode, made fun of Ino, and then resumed the story.  Sakura decides to follow Ino’s advice of skipping town and we find out that Ino is actually serving a dark master (that the author reveals in her author’s notes to be Madara Uchiha, because what the hell is suspense and mystery about, right?)

With that, let’s start the next chapter, which is really an author’s note, because Darksakudragon doesn’t put enough author’s notes before, during, halfway through, and at the end of the prose as it is.

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1769: Betrayal – Chapter One

Title: Betrayal
Author: Darksakudragon
Media: Anime
Topic: Naruto
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: Chapter One
Critiqued by Lyle

I’m sorry.  I’m so, so very sorry.  I can’t apologize enough for what I’m about to subject you to, my poor lovelies.  Welcome to “Betrayal.”

“Betrayal” hails from the Naruto section of ff.net.  Koori has been conspicuously absent since I mentioned I was going to look into riffing this fic, but I’m sure she’ll show up periodically to rage at the story for it’s numerous inaccuracies.  I won’t bother infodumping before we get started since I’ve done Naruto fics in here before.

Let’s dive in.

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1715: Digiball Z: The Movie – Chapter Five

Title: Digiball Z: The Movie
Author: Dakari-King Mykan
Media: Anime
Topic: Digimon/Dragonball Z
Genre: Adventure/Action/Crossover
URL:  Chapter Five
Critiqued by AwkwardFerret

So, uh…bit of a hiatus. School started up again and I wanted a chance to get accustomed before resuming this. But now that I’m free, let’s go!

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