2042: Salvation – Chapters 2 and 3 (Finale)

Title: Salvation
Author: FreddysNightmare1984
Media: Film
Topic: Deliverance
Genre: Adventure/Suspense
URL: Chapter 2
Critiqued by BatJamags

Caution: Fic contains extreme plot regurgitation. Please take appropriate sanitary measures.

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another thrilling chapter of Deliverance: Comments from the Peanut Gallery Edition. Let’s start the next chapter before I talk myself out of doing this, shall we?

WHOOT,

On second thought, maybe I should just scrap the whole thing. Door, would you mind letting me out?

*No*

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2038: Salvation – Chapter 1

Title: Salvation
Author: FreddysNightmare1984
Media: Film
Topic: Deliverance
Genre: Adventure/Suspense
URL: Chapter 1
Critiqued by BatJamags

Caution: Fic contains extreme plot regurgitation. Please take appropriate sanitary measures.

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m submitting this little two-shot riff out of order. Screw the Backlog of Doom, this needs to be mocked right now.

Why? Well, allow me to direct your attention to the header.

Topic: Deliverance

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1997: Nightmares in Wonderland – Chapters Nine and Ten

Title: Nightmares in Wonderland
Author:  OnlyALittleMad
Media: Movie / Video Game
Topic: American McGee’s Alice / Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Genre: Suspense/Horror
URL: Nightmares in Wonderland
Critiqued by TacoMagic

We’re finally here, the last two chapters!

Well, that’s being a bit generous.  It’s more like the last chapter and then a little chapter booster pack.

Last time we finally had something happen!  It was stupid, but it was a happening, so it’s at least progress toward wherever the author thought this was going.  The whole chapter boiled down to a particularly sloppy GM session where a new player joins the table and has to be added to the party.  There was a fairly nonsense scene where the tweedle-three threatened the lives of the children in order to… uh… magruamfum.  Luckily their motivations are irrelevant since a bunch of cats pop out of the SDQF and stab them with shards of plotonium anyway.

Everyone up to speed?  No?  Perfect!

Chapter 9: Down The Rabbit Hole

*Porno music blares over the PA system*

Well, at least she didn’t wheel that damn contraption in here this time.

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1992: Nightmares in Wonderland – Chapter Eight

Title: Nightmares in Wonderland
Author:  OnlyALittleMad
Media: Movie / Video Game
Topic: American McGee’s Alice / Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Genre: Suspense/Horror
URL: Nightmares in Wonderland
Critiqued by TacoMagic

Howdy-doodly do, patrons!

Last time we kinda sorta almost had something happen!  This happening boils down to the voices in Alice’s head telling her to kill the candy maker so that she doesn’t fall in love.  Because apparently love will open the way for the Queen of Hearts because she’s second in line for the throne.  Because that’s how hereditary monarchies work.  At the very end of the seventh chapter, Wonka finishes time traveling to the Victorian era and arrives at the asylum.  And that was pretty well it.

Let’s see what we’ve got this week!

Chapter 8: Meet Your New Nightmare

Well, my worst nightmare is apparently Rambo, so maybe my new nightmare is Batman?

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1986: Nightmares in Wonderland – Chapters Six and Seven

Title: Nightmares in Wonderland
Author:  OnlyALittleMad
Media: Movie / Video Game
Topic: American McGee’s Alice / Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Genre: Suspense/Horror
URL: Nightmares in Wonderland
Critiqued by TacoMagic

Heyo, patrons!  Welcome back to “Nightmares in Wonderland!”

Last time we had two solid chapters of padding.  Literally nothing of interest happened; all we got was hardcore mirror fixation and brooding.  Fortunately, Maddie seemed to, at some level, understand that what she was writing wasn’t very good.  Unfortunately she quashed those instincts and posted the chapters up anyway.  C’est la vie.

Let’s see what she’s got in store for us this week!

Chapter 6: Look Beyond What You See

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1983: Nightmares in Wonderland – Chapters Four and Five

Title: Nightmares in Wonderland
Author:  OnlyALittleMad
Media: Movie / Video Game
Topic: American McGee’s Alice / Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Genre: Suspense/Horror
URL: Nightmares in Wonderland
Critiqued by TacoMagic

Howdy, doodly-do, patrons!

Last time in Nightmares in Wonderland we didn’t make much plot progression.  It was mostly just empty grimdork edginess pandering as Alice was locked in a jail cell by a pirate orderly in the prison wing of the Arkham Rutledge Asylum.  There was also a small child in the cell with her named Maggie, who may be a delusion or might be an author insertion (it’s a close call since the author’s name is similar); we’re going to keep an eye on that situation.  Meanwhile, we learned that Wonka has a Dark Tortured Past™ of being an inmate of the Arkham Rutledge Asylum.  And that was pretty much it.  Three sentences to sum up two whole chapters.  Not great, author, not great.

Onwards!

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1977: Nightmares in Wonderland – Chapters Two and Three

Title: Nightmares in Wonderland
Author:  OnlyALittleMad
Media: Movie / Video Game
Topic: American McGee’s Alice / Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Genre: Suspense/Horror
URL: Nightmares in Wonderland
Critiqued by TacoMagic

Hey, patrons!  Welcome back to Nightmares in Wonderland, the fic that dares to explore the untapped drama of thrift shopping.

Last time, we got a bunch of shoveled American McGee’s Alice plot regurgitation, both from me and the fic, as well as a scene where Charlie is gifted a cursed mirror that was inexplicably for sale, take it for free.  And that’s pretty much it, so let’s just jump into chapter two!

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