1224: Legendary Adventurers, Futuristic Saviors – Chapter Eight, Part Five

Title: Legendary Adventurers, Futuristic Saviors
Author: Stone-Man85 – and N’jata by proxy.
Media: Movie
Topic: Princess Mononoke
Genre: Adventure/Romance
URL: Chapter 8
Critiqued by SC, Fox, and Sir Paulo Rori

Hello, and welcome back to Legendary Adventurers, Futuristic Saviors, by Stone-Man85! I’m your host, SC, and last time, we had a super short riff where not a lot really happened. This time, the riff is gonna be LOOOOONG, because I plan to finish this chapter this week, so be prepared for a long read.

But before that, of course, I have to welcome Sir Paulo Rori –

Paulo: Good day to you.

– And my other guest for this week, an OC of mine named Fox!

O hai, Fox!

O hai, Fox!

Fox: ‘Sup!

Fox is an interesting character, actually. He’s one of those characters that I, for some reason, can’t write a story without including. William is another one, I can’t write a story without a William somewhere. There’s a William in my previous NaNo story, there’s going to be a Fox in my current NaNo story, and the both of them also exist as protagonists of their own separate stories in a little series I’m working on on the side for funsies. It’s kind of like Link and Zelda: invariably, there will always be both of them in every Zelda game. Or Cid, from Final Fantasy: gotta have one.

Even if it's a girl.

Even if it’s a girl.

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1223: Tomorrow Is Always Better – Chapter 4



Title: Tomorrow Is Always Better
Author: LaRae and Ninjas Incorporated
Media: Anime/Manga
Topic: Ouran High School Host Club
Genre:  Romance/Hurt/Comfort
URL: Chapter 4
Critiqued by Ghostcat


Welcome back, best-beloved Patrons!

We’re slogging our way through another chapter of this nothing-narrative; in the last chapter the most exciting thing that happened was that Random Friend Lena was lost and Kyo-Sue found her and took her home. That was it, the whole chapter.

Here’s hoping this chapter is a little more substantial.

XOXOXOXOXOXOX Disclaimer…. Well I’m depressed… Mori nor Kyoya would give me OHSHC so I don’t own it XOXOXOXOXOXOXOX

I’m wondering if the author realizes that Bisco Hatori and not the characters owns OHSHC.

Kyoya: didn’t I tell you that all ready Kyoko?

Me: Maybe, I don’t know.

You did. It was very annoying.

Kyoya: I did so stop asking

Me: fine I will

Does that mean these chatty little ANs will stop? Because I’m all for that.

Chapter 4: Safe house

Either there’s a new character named Chapter 4, or this is the chapter title. Could go either way.

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1222: Kamen Rider Ryuki: A Rider’s Persona – Chapter Four, Part 2

Title: Kamen Rider Ryuki: A Rider’s Persona
Author: Nero Angelo Sparda
Media:  TV Shows/Video Games
Topic: Kamen Rider Ryuki/Persona
Genre:  Adventure
URL: Kamen Rider Ryuki: A Rider’s Persona Chapter 4
Critiqued by Herr Wozzeck

Hello folks, and welcome back for the last installment of this particular crossover. Well, it certainly wasn’t the worst thing I’ve snarked, but it was… well, it was still pretty bad. A festival of “meh”, all told.

I just wish it stopped assuming we were idiots half the time. ‘Cause that seriously gets super annoying after a while.

Anyway, let’s get going, shall we?

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1221: The Legend of Dragoon: The Eighth Spirit – Chapter Twenty-Eight, Part Two

Title: The Legend of Dragoon: The Eighth Spirit
Author: PhoenixofShadows
Media: Video Game
Topic: Legend of Dragoon
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: The Legend of Dragoon: The Eighth Spirit
Critiqued by TacoMagic and Swenia

Six-and-a-half chapters.  Just six-point-five and we’re done.  We can do this.  Probably.

“And then I get my Wednesday back, right?”

Oh definitely.  For a while anyway.

“Ominous.  So last time the character blob lurched its way back to Feltz to meet with the king. After a protracted exchange with a gate gaurd, and then a quick run to grab the local governor to the princess, the group gets in for an audience with King Zior.  The king’s a bit muddled, which sets off Stanky’s jackass trigger sending him into full douchewarehouse mode.  Luckily, before Stanky can ruin the whole thing by being himself, he’s distracted by Meru long enough for Dart to secure the pass that will allow them into the Valley of Corrupt Gravity.  Then, despite how abominably he’s been treated by Stanky, the King still graciously invites them to stay the night in the palace, proving that he’s far more good intentioned than anyone in the blob.  And that’s where we left off.”

Let’s dig into the rest of this thing!

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1220: The Hammer Effect – Chapters 28 & 29

Title: Hammer Effect
Author: Kamzil118
Media: Video Games
Topic: Warhammer 40,000 (40k)/ Mass Effect
Genre: Adventure/Sci-fi
URL:  Chapter 28 & 29
Critiqued by Erttheking. 

Ert: Oh good fuck. *Dry heaves* I hate this story

Goeth: Rape trigger three for three?

Ert: No…but he does write a sex scene. A horrible horrible sex scene.

Goeth: Ah yes. The exchanging of fluids that’s so important for some reason.

Nora: *Sigh*. This story is just trying as hard as it can to fail on every level.


Ert: We would like information on culture. Author, you can talk about culture when you actually understand anything about it. I don’t care if it’s just the dictionary definition, know SOMETHING!

The Citadel/Embassy

Farseer Lofn entered her room to see General Siegfried turning around to see her.

“What are you doing here?”

“I was looking for you.” Stated Siegfried.

“For what reason?”

“Oh, just so I could call you a hybrid.” Lofn stared coldly at the general for a moment before regaining her composure.

Ert:…Is Lt. Stu fucking twelve years old? No really, he constantly acts like he’s twelve. He storms out of arguments the second things stop going his way, he heckles people by resorting to name calling (Highly unoriginal name calling at that) and he commonly resorts to childish actions to annoy people, like leaving mud on the Citadel floors.

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