1963: Star Wars: Shadow War Episode I – Chapter Five

Title:  Star Wars: Shadow War Episode I
Author:  dragonfang33
Media: Movie / Cartoon
Topic: Star Wars / MLP
Genre: Sci-Fi / Adventure
URL: Star Wars: Shadow War Episode I
Critiqued by TacoMagic and Darth Lord Crunchy (Retired)

Heyo, patrons!  Welcome back to Shadow War Episode I, Part I, Book 2, Chapter 5, Subsection 27, Paragraphs c through q:l.

“Do not tempt the author with knowledge of finer-grained sectioning.”

Oof, good point.  Last time our resident Sith-bait Stu, Kennith, or whatever his name is, made landfall with his cohort of other forgettable, cut-and-paste characters.  They quickly stumbled upon one of the resident ponies of the area, swapped exposition, then headed off to join the dance party already in progress.  Meanwhile in orbit, Kaleb’s clone twin brother in everything except plot assignment waffled on about whether his hodgepodge fleet of 3,000 discount ships could possibly take on a single Jedi and his Celestial Uberwang.  Eventually he decides his fleet is no match, probably due to genre savviness more than anything else, and decides to try to search for help on the planet, which pretty much limits him to an alliance with the Smooze.

“Which none exposed to the section title ‘The Smooze Campaign’ could possibly have predicted.”

And since the Smooze are pretty limited in attack strategy to blorping all over everything, we can all expect some absolutely riveting combat scenes in our future.

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1962: A Special Task — Chapters 18, 19, and 20

Title: A Special Task
Author: Generatedname
Media: Video Game
Topic: Mass Effect
Genre: Sci-Fi/Adventure
URL: Chapter 18Chapter 19, and Chapter 20

Hello hello all you patrons, and welcome back to another ‘special’ chapter of A Special Task.

Previously, we had our hopes that this ‘fic might actually go in a direction that wasn’t good but was at least different when the whole Bataliban Revolution arc was unceremoniously dropped in favor of the defrosting of Javik on Eden Prime and his subsequent regurgitation of stale memes and rich, chunky Reaper exposition.

Long story short, both the turians and the asari began making military preparations for the Reapers’ arrival (for all the good it will do us), while the salarians and hanar both seceded from the Council– the hanar to join the humans, and the salarians to… actually, I’m not really sure what the salarians’ plan was other than to hurt themselves economically and politically.”

Just Write A Star Trek Crossover Already Counter: 6

The next chapter promises quarians, which are always a good thing to include in an HFY fic, but before that we’re going to have to put up with another visit from our old, dear friend MISTER POINTLESS CODEX ENTRY:

Project Manifest: Vesta Laboratories, Cerberus Division

Or… I guess Mister Pointless Manifest Entry, that works too.

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1961: Valkyrie: The Unknown Unit – Chapter Three, Part Two

Title: Valkyire: The Unknown Unit
Author: JewishPotato
Media: Video Game
Topic: Overwatch
Genre: Adventure
URL: Chapter Three
Critiqued by SC, Book Specs, Contacts and Bifocals

*Contacts shifts uncomfortably in his seat*

*Bifocals growls, whilst glaring daggers at Contacts*

*Book Specs munches on popcorn and offers the bowl to SC*

I still don’t see what you have against buttered popcorn, bro.

*Book Specs rolls his eyes, and with a single flick of a finger, telekinetically tosses a piece of popcorn at SC’s head; SC deftly avoids the tiny popped projectile*

I mean, I get it’s personal preference, but-

Contacts: Can we please start the riff before she kills me?!

Bifocals: Why do you think I will kill you before the riff?

Contacts: Oh, fucking Christ…

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1960: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better – Chapter 4

 

 

Title: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better
Author: Beowulf the Novelborn
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/”Romance”
URL Chapter 4
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to another updated fic!

This is the Subnautica fic of asteroid-punching ship defenses fame, the previous chapters can be found here. The timing is quite appropriate, considering that the game finally fully launched on Tuesday after years in beta and having the launch date constantly pushed back due to technical problems. (EDIT: And in a nicely ironic turn of events, the launch livestream ended up being delayed due to technical difficulties.)

When last we left the “trouble-sought son” he was playing around with the fabricator and scanner, and there was an unknown person trapped in a PRAWN suit who managed to blast themselves out of some sand.

On to the fic!

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1959: Maya and Raider – Chapter Nine

Title: Maya and Raider
Author: 
Eclipsepheniox
Media: Video Game
Topic: Borderlands
Genre: Adventure/Romance
URL: 
Chapter 9
Critiqued by Delta XIII

Happy New Year, peeps and creeps! (yes, I know the New Year has long since passed, shut up.)
Welp, let’s get on with this.

EVERYTHING WRONG
WITH
Maya and Raider
Chapter 9

(here we go again)

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1958: Star Wars: Shadow War Episode I – Chapter Four

Title:  Star Wars: Shadow War Episode I
Author:  dragonfang33
Media: Movie / Cartoon
Topic: Star Wars / MLP
Genre: Sci-Fi / Adventure
URL: Star Wars: Shadow War Episode I
Critiqued by TacoMagic and Darth Lord Crunchy (Retired)

Hey, Patrons!  Welcome back to Star Wars: Shadow War Episode I, and you’re just in time to see the Celestial Uberwang penetrate deep into the Unknown Regions.

“Must you phrase it that way?”

Absolutely.  Want to handle the recap?

“Very well.  The Jedi boarded their compensation-class Star Destroyer while the Shadow Order landed the bouillabaisse army onto the pony homeworld in hopes of defeating the most overwhelming enemy imaginable:  The Spring Festival Dance Party.”

Sadly, the chapter was not nearly as interesting as that summary of it.  Anyway let’s see what’s in store for us this-

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1957: A Special Task — Chapters 15, 16, and 17

Title: A Special Task
Author: Generatedname
Media: Video Game
Topic: Mass Effect
Genre: Sci-Fi/Adventure
URL: Chapter 15Chapter 16, and Chapter 17

Hello hello all you patrons! Last time on A Special Task we were treated to the beginning, middle, and end of the Bataliban Batarian Rebellion all tied up in a nice Gary Stumanity bow. First, the humans encountered a Bataliban ‘separatist’ frigate- how did ‘separatists’ get a frigate to begin with??- and granted it asylum without bothering to figure out what it wanted or what was even going on (and also blew the everloving tar out of the massive Hegemony pursuit fleet that had somehow managed to not destroy it for an unspecified amount of combat beforehand. After that the humans immediately started smuggling (drastically underpowered compared to their own shit) weaponry to Kar’shan, which struck me as a bit weird given that the ‘separatists’ were revealed to possess entire space stations completely under their control.

Despite apparently having an enormous manpower and materiel advantage over the Hegemony their coordinated assault was well on its way to failing due to their troops inability to do anything other than charge directly into danger and get themselves shot, but fortunately the humans then showed up to bail them out. This process was repeated to ‘pacify’ all of the batarian colonies, out to the last Hegemony holdouts on Arathot (where two thirds of the population was killed!) at which point the humans found Object Rho and the Batarian Republic (whose actual policies are still uncertain but who was apparently thinking of continuing to hold all of the Council citizens the Hegemony had abducted as slaves until Tevos talked them out of it) decided to join the Grand Interstellar Alliance Of Fuck-The-Salarians-And-Their-Little-Dog-Too.

Just Write A Star Trek Crossover Already Counter: 6

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