2540: Five Nights with Jack – Chapter 4

Title: Five Nights with Jack
Author: mah29732
Media: Video Game/TV Show
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s/Samurai Jack
Genre: Mystery/Suspense
URL: Chapter 4
Critiqued by Ghostcat





Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to more … whatever this trainwreck is.

In the last chapter there was a confrontation between Jack and Aku, until Aku got bored and wandered off. Then some other stuff happened, but no one really cares about that because it probably isn’t important.

Also, the Big Book of Ponderations for Sleepless Nights is still here, hovering in the corner, and a cluster of raccoons has built a shrine that mostly looks to be made of tin foil and apple cores around it. Not sure where the raccoons came from, but I’ve learned not to question things too closely.

Chapter 4: Sensing Aku

Is it really that hard to find a near-omnipotent shape-shifting demon who rules the entire universe?

Jack was awaiting the next night when he was doing his best during the day to try to hunt for Aku.

From inside the pizza restaurant, where he’s locked up until the five nights have passed. All Aku would have to do to get away is just … Leave.

It’s almost as if this fic is designed to suck all the dramatic tension out of itself.

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2539: Task Force Ash – “Chapter 9” and Chapter 10

Title: Task Force Ash
Author: Ghost509
Media: Video Games
Topic: Pokémon and Call of Duty
Genre: Adventure / “”””””””Romance””””””””
URL: Chapter 10
Critiqued by Zeus, Svarti, Ramirez, Judger, and special guest Anakin “The Chosen One” Skywalker

*Holo-Recording starts up*

Zeus: Welcome to yet another part of the TFA riff, where we examine just how deep the rabbit hole goes.

Svarti: In the last two riffs, Ash became an even bigger Sue, we had a sex scene for 1/4 of a chapter, and the rest was spent glorifying this massive dick with a murder spree.

Ramirez: And in other news, chapter 9 is actually an authors note asking for help. Normally we’d skip it…

Judger: But we’ll let it speak for itself.

*Buzzsaw Noises*

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2538: Legend of Zelda: The True Force – Chapter Twenty-Three, Part Three

Title: Legend of Zelda: The True Force
Author:  Hikari no Vikki
Media: Video Game / Movie
Topic: Legend of Zelda / Star Wars
Genre: Adventure / Fantasy
URL: Legend of Zelda: The True Force
Critiqued by TacoMagic and Retired Darth Lord Crunchy

Zzzzzzzzzzzzz *SNERK*

*Taco sits bolt upright*

Whazza?  How long was I out?  *Checks his phone* A week!?  Oh, this damn boring fic.  Crunchy!

*Crunchy’s eyelids slide open and he straightens his neck from resting position.*  “Hmm.  Wednesday already?”


“When you reach my age, you will learn the importance of napping.”

Dude, a week is closer to a coma.

“When you reach my age, you will learn the importance of limited duration comas.”

Whatever, what happened last week?

“Discussion, reiteration, bathing,” *Crunchy picks up a piece of paper which was left on the desk* “and apparently ‘the girls’ were placed in confinement.”

Fabulous, let’s finish this chapter off.  It’s the second-to-last interlude chapter, so hopefully we’ll only have to suffer through this level of meandering pointlessness one more time.

“The typical level of meandering pointlessness will remain, yes?”

Sadly, this is true.

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2537: Mass Murder Effect: The First War Crime (Was Committed By The Protagonists) — Chapter 11 Part 1

Title: Mass Effect: The First War
Author: ProfFartBurger
Media: Video Game
Topic: Mass Effect
Genre: Adventure/Sci-Fi
URL: Chapter 11
Critiqued by AdmiralSakai

Hello hello all you patrons, and welcome back to Mass Effect: The First War.

Previously, Grand Moff Whyney twirled his mustache some more about destroying Palaven and some turian colonies, and a turian ship that somehow survived the massacre on the borders of the Sol System bombarded Tokyo, and Not-Master-Chief the Not-SPARTAN wandered around and killed some dudez in the rubble, and… that was about it, actually!


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2536: Battlestar Prometheus – Chapter 1

Title: Battlestar Prometheus
Author: Ruin Queen of Oblivion
Topic: Battlestar Galactica (2003-05)/X-Men
Media: TV show/Multi-media comics franchise
Genre: Sci-fi/Adventure
URL: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9266464
Critiqued by Crazy Minh and Major Wade

[And now, a riff that Crazy Minh sent me more than a month ago. Sorry about that. I’ve also taken the liberty of adding a few insights about the X-Men half of the crossover, mostly identifying characters the author doesn’t describe very well and providing wiki links for curious patrons. – Bats]

Hello, dear patrons, and a very Merry Christmas to you all! Welcome to the first break in the monotony that is EclipsePheniox’s ‘Trapped in 40k’. I’m your guest riffer, Crazy Minh, and over there at the tactical console is our special guest, Major Wade!

Sir…do we really have to do this?

Oh no, we do. Now, as I’ve already made clear in my riff of ‘Battlestar Highschoolia’, I am a massive BSG fan. In my humble opinion, Battlestar Galactica (2003) is the best military science-fiction TV show of the early 2000’s. In terms of broader science-fiction greats of the era, it ranks up there with Firefly, Star Trek: Enterprise, and Stargate: Atlantis. It is- for either the better or worse- the progenitor of the recent tsunami of dark, gritty science-fiction television programs that have taken over the genre. But unlike some shows (*cough*Discovery*cough*), it doesn’t take the road into edgelord territory. Well…for the most part, at least. The show was- and still is- extremely popular. I’d highly recommend watching it if you already haven’t. If you have watched it, watch it again!

With that popularity comes the obligatory fanfiction. With that fanfiction comes the bizarre crossovers. Thus, we have ‘Battlestar Prometheus’, a crossover with X-Men, which is 90% blatant plot-regurgitation, and 10% plain wrong. Let us begin:

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