Title: Love and War
Author: Z3R0 L0V3
Media: Video Game
Genre: Adventure / Romance
URL: Chapter 2
Critiqued by eatpraylove
Welcome back to “Love and War,” fellow patrons. Last chapter, we met our protagonist, Princess Dawn of Sinnoh, and her intended, Prince Paul of Hoenn (rather than of Veilstone for some reason). We also met the author’s primary flaws as, well, an author: Terse paragraphs, a total lack of background description, punctuation errors I didn’t waste time pointing out, and a helping of clichés just for good measure.
(I’m still scratching my head over the visible lack of any actual Pokémon in this AU.)
We also got treated to an equally daybook (thanks to BatJamags for reminding me what that’s called in the comments section) but far more dramatic ending that hinted at a larger plot than just relationship drama! Let’s see where it goes from here. And before I forget, the cliché counter is currently at five.
*sits back down in riffing chair*
*sips tea* Ahhhh. Tea makes everything more bearable.
Title: Fight For Freedom
Media: Cartoon / Video Game
Topic: My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic / Fallout
Genre: Sci-Fi, Tragedy, and ‘Random’
URL: Fight For Freedom
*It’s a quiet morning at RIFFCON; absent the Admiral and his retinue of highly trained soldiers snarkers, the audible hum of computer equipment softly fills the room. That is, until a bearded, bespectacled human in a jumpsuit makes his way inside, pushing a mop bucket. He sits down at the vacant console an-*
Alright, that’s enough of that. Morning, y’all, I’m Serketry, one of Admiral Sakai’s staff. Sorry, no aliens this time, just me. While technically my list of duties includes I.T. support, squad-based tactics, and all things Homestuck, MLP, and Fallout, most of my assignments have been more… janitorial. Which means I’m here to start mucking out the Orphanage. This here’s my first riff all by my lonesome, so I’m gonna start with something that gives me the home field advantage…
Fight For Freedom, by Shadowflameking, featuring Gore, Violence, and Death.
How thoughtful of you, fimfiction, to just lay it all out like that. This isn’t the first MLP/Fallout crossover travesty this site’s seen, and with what’s still in the Orphanage, it won’t be the last. It’s either this or keep mopping the floors, and, between you and me, I’d rather riff a dozen shitty MLP fics than clean up after Guard-Novitiate Nina. *shudders*
Welp, time to go to work.
Title: Padme-Series: Clone Trooper
Author: Darth Sith’ari
Topic: Star Wars
Genre: None given, other than the fact that it’s an AU
URL: Chapter Six
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags and Jamags)
Hello once again patrons! I’m your guest host, BatJamags, this is your guest guest host, Jamags-
-and we’re back with even more boring AU!
Jamags: Your tone indicates that I should be excited.