2405: The Purple Queen – Chapter 18

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 18
Critiqued by BatJamags

Get Me Pictures of the Red Queen, Parker!

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 64
Roll Call count: 7

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another chapter of the fic that has been doing literally nothing whatsoever for the last two or three chapters. Let’s see if we can keep up the streak.

Not… quite what I had in mind, but it’s sure as hell more entertaining than this fic.

The morning was just another to Ruby, of course. Wake up, train with her sweetheart for an hour or so, and take a nice relaxing bath. As to what was different? She was currently pulling fibers from the large plants around the area and weaving them together, making a sort of braid about six inches in length, and about half an inch in diameter. After sizing over her work and looking suitably proud of it, Ruby took her growing hair, which by this point reached to just below her shoulder blades, and tied it together in a plain old ponytail using the fiber rope to hold it in place. Simple solutions to simple problems.

For those of you just tuning in, this is basically a sped-up version of the last third of the last chapter. The fic’s pace has slowed so much that we went backwards.

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2399: The Purple Queen – Chapter 17

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 17
Critiqued by BatJamags

Far, Far Away….

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 39

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and after last week’s big pile of nothing (a void which I futilely struggled to fill with superhero jokes), we’re back with what is doubtlessly more nothing.

Why didn’t I quit back at Chapter 10 again?

“Hmm.”

Hmm?

Hmm…

Hmm.

In his office, Ozpin heaved a sigh, his dozenth within the past hour.

OK, Bat-Ozpin, we need to have an intervention. Literally every scene with you starts with you sighing in your office, and it’s just getting out of hand.

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2393: The Purple Queen – Chapter 16

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 16
Critiqued by BatJamags

The Brave and the Bold

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 39

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and after last week’s odd little interlude, I’m back with more of The Red Queen, the fic that dares to add literally five chapters of filler because the show introduced a couple new Grimm. Let’s dive in, shall we?

You know those days where you just don’t want to wake up?

Joke A: Those are mostly the days when I have to read this fic.

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2380: The Purple Queen – Chapter 15

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 15
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags and GoodJamags)

All it Takes is One Bad Fanfic

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 36

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and welcome to one last chapter of this fic before we take a (very brief) oneshot break. Last time, Sueby went to look for a big snake and found it. It tried to eat her. We resume this boring sequence of events in progress.

It could be said that as a person- human or faunus, it doesn’t really matter which- loses their proper control over their Aura when their mind is put into a state of frenzy, panic, or overall disarray.

Of course, no one actually said that, so it was all good.

In these altered states of mind, one could be said to be at their weakest, leaving them open to even the simplest of attacks from Grimm. Without the right mind set, without concentrating on the enemy before them with a cleared mind, one could end up becoming the next among the slain. It was evident back when Ruby was… unceremoniously turned on by her peers and “friends”. Had she not been so confused, had her emotions not bee in turmoil, she likely could have walked out of that fight with little more than a few scratches. But when she was as confused as she was there, when her mind was racing in fifty different directions, her Aura was at it’s weakest, and could not fully protect her from those with evil intentions.

This is going to be leading into something stupid.

With that in mind, for one who’s mind is in a frenzy, maintaining their Aura for use in defense or offense is generally difficult to nearly impossible. That said, with enough concentration, it can be done. As before Checkmate’s eyes stood a little girl, wearing a red hood. In her hands was a blade that bore the blood and scent of it’s young, and adorning her face was a mask of sheer hatred. Just looking at her, that blade pointed towards it’s head, even Checkmate understood one, simple thing. This wasn’t simply another one of the human and faunus’ hunters. No. It was someone, something, far darker. It was interesting, so to say, to Checkmate that such a small being could harbor so much negativity. Even for a being of the light, one with a soul, hers was stained noticeably, very much so. This created a situation where this Grimm, one that knew neither fear nor concern, nor even interest, simply felt what could only be described as curiosity towards this little one. And this made it contemplate it’s next move very much.

FUCKING HAVE SOMETHING HAPPEN ALREADY!

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2375: The Purple Queen – Chapter 14

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 14
Critiqued by BatJamags

Crisis on Infinite Snakes

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 36

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and, if any of you happen to be French, Happy Bastille Day! Are you happy yet? Good, now I’m going to ruin the mood by showing you more of this fic. This chapter is entitled “Don’t Tread On Me,” which makes me think I should’ve been scheduling this closer to the 4th, but meh. Let’s get started.

Nipping at her nose was a slight chill.

Yuletide carols being sung by a choir, and folks dressed up like Eskimos?

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2368: The Purple Queen – Chapter 13

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 13
Critiqued by BatJamags

It was…………………………………………………….Bat-Ozpin!

Uwaah count: 12
A Sentence Fragment count: 32

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and hey, it’s more of this. Aren’t you excited? No? Great!

Last time, Ruby had a fight with Roman, Emerald, and Mercury. Cinder showed up. My chapter summaries continued being depressingly short.

‘Okay,’ Ruby mused to herself. ‘This is getting a little complicated. Roman alone would have been a tough fight, and his two new henchmen didn’t seem to be the type of just drop so easily. And to top it all off, this woman managed to fight off Miss Goodwitch, a capable and well trained Huntress with years of experience under her belt.

Whose job apparently entails being Ozpin’s coffee-getter.

This isn’t exactly looking the best.

The fic? I should think not.

The White Fang goons have already been taken care of, so should I just have Dinah and the other retreat? I can probably escape from here pretty easily. Shit!’

The four villains just kind of stood there, slack-jawed, while Sueby had her internal debate.

Ruby was thinking deeply about her present situation. To say it was bad wouldn’t be the entire truth, nor would it be entirely incorrect.

It would, however, be a way of wasting entirely too much of the reader’s time on nothing.

Three variables.

Three Sentence Fragments! Three! Ah-ah-ah! Count: 33

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2366: The Purple Queen – Chapter 12

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 12
Critiqued by BatJamags

The Superior Spider-Grimm

Uwaah count: 12
A Sentence Fragment count: 30

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another exciting chapter of The Red Queen! Last time, Bat-Ozpin learned that the reports of Sueby’s death were so blatantly fake a brain-dead squirrel could see it greatly exaggerated and sent Yang and Jaune to go look for her. Meanwhile, Sueby went to a place and bought things and maybe saw Roman Torchwick. The latter sequence of events took up the bulk of the wordcount because of course it did.

So, let’s dive into the next chapter!

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