2847: Hatchling carer – Chapter 3

Title: Hatchling carer
Author: lunabloodmoon666
Media: Movie
Topic: Jurassic Park
Genre: Romance/Adventure
URL: Chapter 3
Critiqued by: Ghostcat

Generic greetings, my dear Patrons, and welcome to another chapter!

In the last chapter we made it past the tyrannosaur attack scene, there was a few not very subtle hints that the raptors are loose and stalking Alex, Alan, and the kids, which has led to the decision to spend the night up in a tree. Not the same tree; Alex has to have her own tree. Because that makes it easier for her to get separated from the group.

We all know that’s where this is going. To the fic!

I own nothing but Alex.

I understand how OCs and fanfiction works, thanks.

Alex POV:

There’s been absolutely no change in the perspective, so there is no need to keep adding these POV Tags. There’s generally not a need for them anyway, but there is even more of a reason to skip them in this instance.

I woke to small pebbles being thrown at me, it turned out that Alan and the kids were waking me from there tree.

Why are there pebbles in their tree?

The raptors had left and so we all climbed down very carefully, once I had reached the floor I ran over to assist Alan and the kids as Tim was having a little trouble being shorter and that meant it was harder to reach the branches but we finally got him down to our level before we trekked on.

I could see having trouble climbing up the tree if he was too short to reach, but gravity does most of the work on the way down.

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2846: Hatchling carer – Chapter 2

Title: Hatchling carer
Author: lunabloodmoon666
Media: Movie
Topic: Jurassic Park
Genre: Romance/Adventure
URL: Chapter 2
Critiqued by: Ghostcat

Hello, and welcome back!

In the previous chapter we were introduced (eventually) to Alex, a dinosaur enthusiast who has a job she definitely isn’t qualified for and she managed to fall asleep during the big tour of the park that her boss’s boss specifically asked her to go on so she could … I have no idea what she was supposed to do, but she didn’t do whatever it was and just fell asleep. Because scene transitions are hard, I guess.

To the fic!

I own nothing but Alex.

Does anyone ever really own a one dimensional cardboard cutout of a character?

Alex’s POV:

I’m wondering if this is going to be yet another fic that uses the POV Tags yet remains in the same perspective the entire time.

I awoke when a loud clap of thunder burst through my subconscious, gasping I looked around to see Donald running from the car at a impressive speed and hiding in the staff toilets while Lex was muttering about being left behind and Tim was holding my arm and rummaging in a large box with his free hand.

Damn. Talk about being dropped in media res. I guess the author wanted to skip past all that really boring stuff that helps establish the setting and characters.

Hearing a ping from the enclosure we were next to my eyes widened at seeing that we had stopped and the enclosure we stopped at was the T rex area and not only that but she had snapped through the supposed electric cables and was glaring at her new habitat before releasing a mighty roar making me shake.

I remember this being a very dramatic scene when I first saw it in the theatre, but all I get from this is a feeling that we are still rushing through everything as fast as possible to get to the bits where the OC can get dicked down by a dinosaur.

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2844: Hatchling carer – Chapter 1

Title: Hatchling carer
Author: lunabloodmoon666
Media: Movie
Topic: Jurassic Park
Genre: Romance/Adventure
URL: Chapter 1
Critiqued by: Ghostcat

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to a new fic by the same author as last week!

And this is the naughty Jurassic Park fic I promised/threatened several weeks ago, although the naughty parts don’t happen until towards the end of the fic. I think. I just skimmed over it, so there’s a chance there’s some other naughty parts slipped in earlier, but we can deal with that as it occurs.

To the summary!

Alex is Roberts sister and the carer of baby Raptor’s until they meet the older pack however how will the baby raptor scents change the bigger pack members POV on the victims especially her when the big one deciedes she is to be his mate… :3 give it chance my first Jurassic park fanfic. Raptor/OC

Hmmm. There’s actually two characters named Robert in the franchise; Robert Muldoon, the head gamekeeper in the original film who runs afoul of the velociraptor pack, and Robert Burke, the Robert Bakker expy from The Lost World who gets pulled through a waterfall and eaten by a tyrannosaurus rex. Since the summary mentions that the OC is in charge of the baby raptors I’m going to assume the Robert in question is Muldoon.

I’m also going to assume that this is yet another Raptor and I  clone where a young female OC has a job they aren’t qualified for and ends up joining the raptor pack after the hurricane hits the island because reasons – although that bit about victims that include the OC after the “big one” decides that she will be his mate is more than a little troubling.

To the fic!

I own nothing other then my OC Alex.

I wonder if it is just a coincidence that there’s a young female character named Lex in the first film? I mean, it’s not like it’s all that difficult to name an OC, right?

Alex POV:

:sighs:

I grinned as I hopped around my little friends, they were so cute at this age. My older brother was watching me shaking his head in slight anger but I knew deep down he knew I wouldnt get hurt, I had this special way with them.

Said everyone who has ever been mauled by an animal ever.

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