1769: Betrayal – Chapter One

Title: Betrayal
Author: Darksakudragon
Media: Anime
Topic: Naruto
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: Chapter One
Critiqued by Lyle

I’m sorry.  I’m so, so very sorry.  I can’t apologize enough for what I’m about to subject you to, my poor lovelies.  Welcome to “Betrayal.”

“Betrayal” hails from the Naruto section of ff.net.  Koori has been conspicuously absent since I mentioned I was going to look into riffing this fic, but I’m sure she’ll show up periodically to rage at the story for it’s numerous inaccuracies.  I won’t bother infodumping before we get started since I’ve done Naruto fics in here before.

Let’s dive in.

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1766: Tales of Vesperia 2: The Blastia Age Restored – Chapter Six, Part One

Title: Tales of Vesperia 2: The Blastia Age Restored
Author: MrAwesomeMattyDA
Media: Video Game
Topic: Tales of Vesperia
Genre: Adventure/Humor
URL: Chapter Six
Critiqued by SC and Teh Specs

Hello, and welcome back to Tales of Vesperia 2: The Blastia Age Restored, by MrAwesomeMatty! I’m your host, SC, joined by Teh Specs, and last time, Yuri and Repede met up with Estelle and Raven, while Tai was sent off to go be broody somewhere where nobody would have to see it. Tai got a weird feeling that Yuri thought he was a bad guy, so he went to try and clear his name, but was then promptly jumped by the Ginyu Force Schwann Brigade’s best and brightest(?), Adecor and Boccos, who had somehow mistaken him for an assassin of Leviathan’s Claw.

This week, we’re jumping into the next chapter, fittingly titled, “It all goes to hell.” And, might I add, it is so nice to be able to get through chapters quickly again.

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1759: Tales of Vesperia 2: The Blastia Age Restored – Chapter Five, Part Two

Title: Tales of Vesperia 2: The Blastia Age Restored
Author: MrAwesomeMattyDA
Media: Video Game
Topic: Tales of Vesperia
Genre: Adventure/Humor
URL: Chapter Five
Critiqued by SC and Teh Specs

Well, hot damn! Been a while since we’ve been here, huh?

Specs: You know, I actually forgot I was part of the riff for this fic until you dragged me in here.

Well, now that I’ve dropped the soul pain that is LAFS off my shoulders, I say we should get back to this, because it’s been far too long since we’ve had any adventures with Rainbow Tai and the Brave Vesperians. With that in mind:

Hello, and welcome back to Tales of Vesperia 2: The Blastia Age Restored, by MrAwesomeMatty! I’m your host, SC, joined by Teh Specs, and last time, Tai, Estelle and Raven made it to Zaphias, news of which was quick to reach the ears of Yuri and Repede. Shortly after their arrival, Tai was instructed to hang out by the ramp down to the Lower Quarter, which was where the riff cut off for two whole years.

So, since I’ve had this thing on hold for so long, let’s not waste anymore time and jump back in!

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1753: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better – Chapter 2

 

Title: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better
Author: Beowulf the Novelborn
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/”Romance”
URL Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

Hola, dear Patrons, and welcome to another chapter of Subnautica fic!

In the last chapter, which was full of asteroid-punching robots that were far less awesome than that sounds, we were introduced to Nero McGill, son of famed survivalist Craig McGill, who is himself a famous adventurer/explorer/survivalist/Stu. Nero, endangering the lives of everyone on the ship by interrupting an important asteroid-punching mission, saved Lt. Jane from possible death – but only after the aforementioned life-endangering interruption caused her to have an accident in the first place. Nero goes back to his room for some zero-G brooding set to eleventh century hymnal music, but is interrupted by Lt. Jane breaking into his room to give him a thank-you shagging.

Now that we’re sufficiently caught up, on to the fic!

Chapter 2: Brace for Impact

:grabs desk:

There better not be a Wall-o-Text heading my way, those things hurt like hell.

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1749: Maya and Raider – Chapter One

Title: Maya and Raider
Author: EclipsePheniox
Media: Video Game
Topic: Borderlands
Genre: Adventure/Romance
URL: Full Fic
Critiqued by Delta XIII

Borderlands 2.

I really like this game. In fact, this is the game that really introduced me to online multiplayer (not that I use it very much, but that’s irrelevant).

For those who don’t know, here’s a quick primer on Borderlands canon (and by “quick primer”, I mean “prepare for an SC-Style Infodump [patent pending]!”):

Borderlands is a series of First-Person Shooters with heavy RPG elements and a focus on co-operative multiplayer and Diablo-style loot collection, affectionately termed “shoot-n’-loot”. Set on the alien world of Pandora (please refrain from making Avatar jokes; as far as I can tell, Borderlands came out first), the story focuses on groups of quirky, violent, uniquely-skilled individuals known as Vault Hunters who, as the name suggests, search for the Vaults: massive, well-hidden caches said to contain valuable treasures.

WARNING! UPCOMING SPOILERS FOR BORDERLANDS 1!

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1747: Legendary Adventurers, Futuristic Saviors – FINALE

Title: Legendary Adventurers, Futuristic Saviors
Author: Stone-Man85
Media: Movie
Topic: Princess Mononoke
Genre: Adventure/Romance
Url: Chapter Fifteen
Critiqued by SC, Sir Paulo Rori and Scarlet of Mesyth

Hello, and welcome back to Legendary Adventurers, Futuristic Saviors, by Stone-Man85! I’m your host, SC, joined by Sir Paulo Rori and Scarlet of Mesyth, and last time, Alex was a creeper, then read a comic book, then regurgitated some plot regarding the Incredible Hulk, and then San told him to stop fucking around and talk about himself, like he had told her he would.

Unfortunately, this means that a good chunk of chapter fifteen is just Alex rehashing everything that we already know about him.

…So instead, I’ma just skip to the part where they both get fucking shot at!

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1746: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better – Chapter 1

 

Title: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better
Author: Beowulf the Novelborn
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/”Romance”
URL Chapter 1
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to the start of a new fic!

This particular fic is also from the Subnautica section of ff.net, although written by a different author; I don’t typically do fics from the same source materials back to back, but I decided to make an exception this time. Let me show you the fic summary and I think you’ll see what drew my attention to this fic.

Nero is the trouble-sought son of the legendary survivalist, Craig McGill, and the young man’s most recent antics have landed him on an unplanned trip for Alterra, and smack dab in the middle of a romance with the ship’s Lieutenant. But when the Aurora crashes his new life, Subnautica has to learn the hard way that you don’t mess with a McGill.

Anyone want to play “Spot the Stu”? I’ll give you three guesses, and the first two don’t count.

I don’t even know what the hell ‘trouble-sought’ is supposed to mean. Is this guy trouble-prone, or a trouble-seeker?

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