2113: A Branch of Burden – Chapter Seven, Part Two – FINALE

Title: A Branch of Burden
Author: Ravager Animas
Media: Video Game
Topic: Etrian Odyssey
Genre: Adventure/Friendship
URL: Chapter Seven
Critiqued by SC

Hello, and welcome back to “A Branch of Burden,” by Ravager Animas! I’m your host, SC, and last time, we had a relatively uneventful post focused on Little Miss Runemaster. Well, and we learned that the Asshole Guild Sniper is actually not part of that guild in the first place, but that wasn’t all that eventful either.

In fact… no offense to Ravager Animas, but I’m just gonna take my own advice from last week and nix the rest of this chapter, in favor of a blanket overview of what happens. Because unfortunately, even though the action picks up a bit in part two, here, it’s still just a whole lot of nothing really going on. This entire chapter is literally just introducing us to a new protagonist, and there are parts where even the narration seems to just be droning on in boredom. I read through this part of the chapter and realized that if I tried to actually riff anything, all I’d be able to say is, “wow, look how boring this all is.”

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2110: Legend of Zelda: The True Force – Chapter Seven, Part Three

Title: Legend of Zelda: The True Force
Author:  Hikari no Vikki
Media: Video Game / Movie
Topic: Legend of Zelda / Star Wars
Genre: Adventure / Fantasy
URL: Legend of Zelda: The True Force
Critiqued by TacoMagic

*Walks into Riffbooth #272, quickly dusts off the console, and turns the “Power on” crank until the computer starts to boot*

Whew, finally back, patrons!  Sorry for that extended break there, but I’m finally past all the convention and guest stuff, so let’s get cracking!

Last time we had a Touching Moment of Bonding™ between Link and Ashei’s younger, less violent and much less interesting expy.  They traveled a while for no real reason beyond that they were heading in the same direction and eventually parted ways once Vikki’s name-drop high wore off.

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2107: A Branch of Burden – Chapter Seven, Part One

Title: A Branch of Burden
Author: Ravager Animas
Media: Video Game
Topic: Etrian Odyssey
Genre: Adventure/Friendship
URL: Chapter Seven
Critiqued by SC and Scarlet of Mesyth

Hello, and welcome back to “A Branch of Burden,” by Ravager Amimas! I’m your host, SC, and last time, Falahein sprung a Cunning Trap™ on the Asshole Guild, successfully incapacitating their members… save for that fucking Sniper who got away in spite of being atomic punched the fuck out by Little Miss Landsknecht. In spite of this, the mission was considered complete, and everybody went back to the inn to take a well-earned rest day (except for Vaseline, who went to get hammered).

This week, we’ve reached the last chapter of the fic: “Sisters”. This might end up being two parts, or it might not, but that remains to be seen. Important to note, however, is that this chapter is from Little Miss Runemaster’s point of view, so sayeth Ravager Animas. So that should be interesting.

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2106: The Power of Thee – Chapter 4

Title: The Power of Thee
Author: FariyFlare
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: Adventure
URL: Chapter 4
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to the last chapter!

When last we met, the Narrator did some fan[ERROR:GENDER NOT FOUND]ing over Golden Freddy, the floor gave way to reveal a suddenly appearing lake of lava so that the Narrator could rescue Golden Freddy and then in turned be rescued by the animatronic. Then the lava inexplicably sealed up the hole in the floor. (I blame Crunchy for that one.) Presumably this means all the animatronics are now able to move around, so hopefully one side of the “they’re not afraid of us”/”we can’t move!” broken record will no get any play in this chapter.

And hey! There’s no key at the top! Not even an Author’s Note. Normally this would make me happy, but I’m wondering if that just means that none of those Reader fic shorthands like Y/N appear in the chapter.

Me and Golden came running out of the room, and notice that something was off right away.

The fact that it should be ‘Golden and I’?

Relf, Valery, Ben and Ann were gone, nowhere in sight.

I guess they meant so little to the fic that they just evaporated.

And just then, as if a spell had been broken, the animatronics sprung to life.

Because that’s definitely something abandoned machinery that’s been sitting around for decades can do.

Bonnie, Chica and Freddy jumped off the stage and frantically started to search the room.

Weren’t they able to ‘see’ the room in some fashion? Did they not notice what happened to the Character Blob?

Foxy then comes running out of Pirate’s Cove and joins in the search.

How did he know that was something he needed to do? He was off by himself in an enclosed section.

After a bit of watching them, I found my voice under all my worry and surprised, and called out to them, “What happened? Where Ann, Relf, Ben and Valery?”

Quick, check the floor for recent volcanic activity!

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2103: Halos in Space Trilogy

Title: Halo: Halos in Space, Halo: Halos in Space 2: Aliens attack, Halos in Space: Reflection
Author: squirrelking
Media: Video Game
Topic: Halo
Genre: SciFi/Adventure
URL: 1, 2, 3
Critiqued by Delta XIII

As the old saying goes, “familiarity breeds contempt”, and I have become very familiar with the works of EclipsePheniox over the last…
*checks date of Chapter 1 riff*
…dear God, it’s been over a year.

Anyway, after eleven chapters of Maya and Raider, I need to cleanse my palate, so I’ve decided to go back to a nice, familiar comfort zone: the works of the illustrious squirrelking!

Today, I will be riffing all three of the Halo fics he’s written, partly because they’re short enough that I can put them all together without padding things out too much, and partly because I need a concentrated dose of So Bad It’s Good to get back in the right mindset.

Oh, and, no Pettiness Sin counter this time; that’s exclusively an EP riff thing.

So, without further ado:

EVERYTHING WRONG
WITH
squirrelking’s Halo Trilogy

(spoilers?)
(probably not)

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2101: The Power of Thee – Chapter 3

 

Title: The Power of Thee
Author: FariyFlare
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: Adventure
URL: Chapter 3
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome back to another chapter! In the last one there was a lot of face and/or head ripping off, but roughly seventy-five percent of the chapter was the animatronics talking amongst themselves about how the kids were totes not scared of them! Amazeballs!

Let’s start off this chapter with :sigh: yet another key.

 

Y/N: Your name

E/C: Eye color

H/C: Hair color

H/L: Hair length

H/T: Hair type {curly, wavy, straight, ect}

F/C: Favorite color

Y/T: Your Town/Hometown

POV: Point of View

A/N: Author Note

This one does not have an attached Author’s Note, but that inclusion of a place makes me worried. Is the audience going to have to provide the setting on top of everything else? And how is the author going to manage to write in a way that would accommodate their audience’s various and diverse hometowns? The only way to do that would be by being as vague as possible.

I’ve answered my own question, haven’t I?

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2096: The Power of Thee – Chapter 2

Title: The Power of Thee
Author: FariyFlare
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: Adventure
URL: Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to the second chapter of this Reader fic! In the first chapter, the Narrator disclosed to their friends – whom I shall call Generic Guy, Annoying Girl, Homestuck, and Highlighter – that the Narrator had discovered the real location of Freddy Fazbear’s Pizzeria – and it’s within walking distance! What a complete shock!

The chapter starts off with the same key … wait a second. What’s that?

Y/N: Your name

E/C: Eye color

H/C: Hair color

H/L: Hair length

H/T: Hair type {curly, wavy, straight, ect}

F/C: Favorite color

POV: Point of View 

:eye-twitch:

There’s going to be POV Tags. Awesome. My favorite.

A/N: Author Note

This is for both boys and girls. Girls are on the left and boys on the right, but you can choice what option you want though.

I can’t tell if that A/N tag is meant to be attached to this disclaimer, or if it is just a warning of things yet to come.

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