1382: Poison – Chapter Seven

Title: Poison
Author: 221B-Tardis
Media: Books
Topic: Snow White / Fairy Tale
Genre: Fantasy / Adventure
URL:  Chapter Seven
Critiqued by Addicted Reader

Welcome back, dear Patrons, to our riff of “Poison,” a “Snow White” fanfic with so much potential and so little good writing.

Previously, Snow White’s mother had to pretend to die in childbirth and change her form because Witchy Sue.  So now the Evil Queen Stepmother is really SW’s mother who was proud when the mirror named SW “fairest of them all.”  The Queen then had a vision of SW being captured by an angry mob so she summoned a palace guard to lose SW in the woods.  When he got her an unspecified distance into the woods, SW woke up and fried him with her laser gaze.  Chapter Five left her running off scared and crying alone in the cold woods.

In Chapter Six, the guard, Ryan, easily got out of the woods and went to a tavern where other guards were drinking.  One of them told a story of SW doing something witchy, which is apparently very terribly scary in this world, though it’s not really explained why.  He gets the tavern patrons riled up into a mob and they run off to kill SW before she can slaughter them (because apparently that’s what they think witches do) while Ryan and the guard who did the inciting stay put.

And now, we continue!

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