1389: Poison – Chapter Eight

Title: Poison
Author: 221B-Tardis
Media: Books
Topic: Snow White / Fairy Tale
Genre: Fantasy / Adventure
URL:  Chapter Eight
Critiqued by Addicted Reader

Hello again, dear readers.  We’re getting close to the end of this fic, and this week we’ll get close a lot faster!  You’ll see below.

But first, the recap:

This is a fanfic of “Snow White” with the interesting premise that the Evil Queen Stepmother is really Snow White’s mother, but the Queen had to pretend to die in childbirth and change her form because Witchy Sue.  The Queen is proud of her daughter when the mirror names SW “fairest of them all” and then sees a vision of SW being attacked and sends her to be lost in the woods for her own protection.

This is actually a pretty good premise for a fanfic (except the Witchy Sue part), but it’s very poorly executed.  We’ve hit most of the major plot points so far (according to the Disney version, of course):  SW’s mother wishing for a daughter with the specified coloring then “dying” in childbirth, a stepmother SW doesn’t get along with, the Mirror Sequence, the Evil Queen Stepmother ordering a guard to lose SW in the woods, and SW finding the dwarves’ cottage, cleaning it, and falling asleep.

Along the way, we also get a very unclear idea of who witches are or how magic works in this story, SW as a Witchy Sue wannabe who fries the guard with a laser gaze when she wakes up after being taken into the woods, and a different guard inciting a mob against SW for being a witch.

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