1275: Real RWBY – Chapters 9-12

Title: Real RWBY
Author: Cynicalnerd
Media: Anime
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Adventure/Romance
URL: Chapter 9, 10, 11, 12
Critiqued by Erttheking

Ert: All right, let’s just get right to this so we can get this piece of crap out of our lives forever and ever.

Chapter 9 The attempt

Nora: Not an attempt to make this story good I take it.

The next few days were long…and with nothing happening, I would go to the docks and wait for the whole day,

Cornelia: Really? He’s still going on the utterly unfounded thought that he’ll find answers at the docks? And the worst part? He’s going to find something, because stories like these don’t have the guts to make it so that their characters wasted an entire week of their lives doing nothing of importance.

only going away for the basic needs of life then to come racing back to that nothing has changed. It was like this for about 2 days, but that’s when I saw Blake with the stowaway…Sun was his name I think?

Ert: Wow. You know absolutely nothing about the world of RWBY. Isn’t that supposed to be the point of SIs? They use their knowledge about the world to their advantage? This guy feels like he was barely interested in RWBY before he wrote this fic and just wanted a place to show off his God powers.

Read the rest of this entry »