2458: RWBY and Outlast – Chapters 5-8

You’re reading about another dimension, a dimension not only of prose and narrative but of pure, concentrated suck. A journey into a twisted land whose boundaries are that of a poor writer’s feeble imagination. That’s the header up ahead—your next stop, the Badfic Zone!

Title: RWBY and Outlast
Author: Fanfic Bros
Media: Web Series / Video Game
Topic: RWBY / Outlast
Genre: Hurt/Comfort / Horror
URL: Chapters 5, 6, 7, and 8
Critiqued by BatJamags and Ruby-Doo!

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with MystRWBY, Inc. for the latter half of this adventure into bizarrely regurgitative crossovers (though thankfully a much shorter one than The True Force)!

Last time, Team RWBY (plus unnecessary OC hanger-on) traveled to Mount Massive Asylum, inexplicably forgetting all of their weapons because plot regurgitation. They all forgot about their respective powers and abilities and got lost in the asylum. They proceeded to fuck around and just generally regurgitate the plot points of the original game. Usually described in terms of “the thing” and “the place” and “the guy.”

Oh, yeah, and the author’s failed attempts and writing their personalities kind of reminded me of the Scooby-Doo! gang, so snarky fake Ruby-Doo! dialogue kind of took over the riff, except by the end it was really more normal snark than Scooby-Doo! jokes because there was only so much mileage I could get out of that. I can virtually guarantee you’re all sick of it by now, but tough luck, I’m having fun. I promise next week’s riff will be all normal-like.

“We need to find the sprinklers valve” said Weiss

“I wonder where it is?” said Ruby

“I dont know Ruby we need to find it”

Weiss: Like, you’re a little slow on the uptake, aren’t you, Ruby-Doo?

Yang: Let’s split up and look for clues!

“Well lets find it before I die of blood loss” said Blake

“Blake it’s fine on the way we’ll try to find a medical kit” said Grey a text noise came

Blake: Damn, if you’re in charge of that then I know I’m – Oh, ew. Whose text tone is that?!

Yang: Uh… Would you believe I did it on a dare?

Ruby-Doo!: Please don’t talk about where you did it. Now give me the phone.

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2452: RWBY and Outlast – Chapters 1-4

You’re reading about another dimension, a dimension not only of prose and and narrative but of pure, concentrated suck. A journey into a twisted land whose boundaries are that of a poor writer’s feeble imagination. That’s the header up ahead—your next stop, the Badfic Zone!

Title: RWBY and Outlast
Author: Fanfic Bros
Media: Web Series / Video Game
Topic: RWBY / Outlast
Genre: Hurt/Comfort / Horror
URL: Chapters 1, 2, 3, and 4
Critiqued by BatJamags and Ruby-Doo!

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with something that really shouldn’t exist. You thought we were done with RWBY, but you were wrong! I decided that this year’s Badfic Zone would focus on horror games instead of movies for a change in pace. Of course, I happened to have a half-finished crossover riff on hand for just such an occasion!

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2445: The Purple Queen – Chapter 25 (FINALE!)

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 25
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags and GoodJamags)

FEED YOUR HEAD

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 189
Roll Call count: 8
Vomit Boy count: 8

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags…

GoodJamags: … And I’m your guest host, GoodJamags…

… And we’re back with the last chapter of The Red Queen! Don’t go reaching for your Kool and the Gang yet, though, because this show ain’t over until the fat lady sings.

(Though if you’re reading that means I already finished this in the past and Celebrating is therefore acceptable)

Last time, Sueby Psychose began her revenge on Weissome McSchneevil, OoC!Blake, Not!Pyrrha, and the other dumbass conspirators. She killed one of the nameless OC conspirators for a while and then nothing else happened. Yang and Jaune were also on their way out to try to de-escalate things. Everybody was very stupid and my Sentence Fragment count is almost at 200.

Even before I start the riff, this chapter is about 6,000 words, which is how long my riffs usually are with snark, and I’m planning on typing up a sizable rant at the end. Still, this is the last installment, and it’s already cutting into what should be the start of the Badfic Zone, so consider this a special jumbo-sized rifftacular!

It should’ve just been another night in Beacon, right?

However, the sun had failed to set at the appropriate time, causing it to continue to be a day in Beacon instead of just another night.

It was very strange.

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2439: The Purple Queen – Chapter 24

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 24
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags and GoodJamags)

Goffik Tearz of Blood

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 158
Roll Call count: 7
Vomit Boy count: 8

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags…

GoodJamags: … And I’m your guest host, GoodJamags…

… And we’re back with the second-to-last chapter of The Red Queen. Last time, Sueby ran around threatening the dumbass conspirators. Onward!

Beacon Academy.

An Academic Sentence Fragment count: 159

On second thought, can we go get coffee before we get started? If literally the first sentence of the chapter is a fragment, I know this is going to be a long one.

GoodJamags: Probably a good idea.

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2434: The Purple Queen – Chapter 23

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 23
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags and GoodJamags)

I’m Gonna Be Just Like You

Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 155
Roll Call count: 7

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with the next chapter of the gripping epic that is The Red Queen. And not happy to be here, either. Last time, OoC!Blake was showing some last-minute attempts at being in-character, but it mostly just amounted waxing angsty about being involved in Ruby’s murder which was so far out of character in the first place that the whole thing is just not working.

Anyway, she ran into Sueby WHO IN THE WORLD COULD THAT BE but nothing really came of it.

“You say that Ruby will be coming back soon?”

“Yes Professor.” Jaune said to Ozpin, looking at him with all due seriousness.

“And exactly what do you base this on, Mister Arc?”

The fact that she’s been wasting time not to have come back even by now?

“Well Professor,” Jaune began, trying to collect his thoughts on the matter. It’s not like this was very easy to explain, but he had to try. “I was talking to Yang before, about Ruby of course. And the topic of Ruby’s personality quirks came up. A fact I had never learned until Yang had told me, Ruby is the type to take things on herself. So if she’s attacked, I doubt she’ll call for help immediately. Add onto that the fact that she was seemingly killed, and she would no doubt want to strike back. Now, gathering Grimm? If that doesn’t prove her intent to fight back, not much would. As for her returning here, and soon, I base this off of a map of all of the attacks and appearances made by the Red Queen.” Saying so, Jaune pulled out a large map of Remnant and placed it on the table. All over the map were various circles, dots, and lines all drawn in a fine point marker.

By the way, I sincerely hope that this isn’t the big thing the author kept promising he was going to do towards the end. Since, you know, it’s kind of really obvious.

“Please do explain what this means, Mister Arc.”

Yeah, that would be apprec-

“Yeah, hurry up and explain Vomit Boy!”

NO NO GET IT IT’S A THING THEY SAY IN THE SHOW AREN’T YOU FUCKING LAUGHING RIGHT NOW

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