1410: Tensei II – Chapter One

Title:  Tensei II
Author:  The KittyCorn Nation (two author-conglomerate known as Monochrome Lynx and Seven Silver)
Media: Anime/Manga
Topic:  Naruto
Genre:  Adventure / Friendship
URL:  Chapter One
Critiqued by Lyle

Good morning, everyone!  Welcome back to “Tensei II.”  Let’s recap!

The first chapter, which was really a prologue, was dumber than calling French Fries “Freedom Fries” because you’re mad at the French for not wanting to get involved in a war.  Self Insert Alice and Self Insert Erectile Dysfunction were on an airplane when the wing exploded for [reasons].  Alice died when the glass windows that don’t exist in airplanes exploded and impaled her.  Then Earwig died when the rest of the airplane exploded for more [reasons].  None of this was a surprise, nor was it in any way suspenseful, though, because we were told in the story summary and in a pointless copy-pasta of the summary within the story before the story actually started that both of them were going to die on the airplane.

Seriously, I could not make this sound stupider if I tried.

With that, let’s get to the actual chapter one!

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