270: A burning Rose – Chapter Seven or Four

Title: A burning Rose
Author: daseylover14
Media: Book / Movie
Topic: Twilight
Genre: AU / Crime / Adventure
URL: A burning Rose – Chapter Seven or Four
Critiqued by Ghostcat

Welcome back, beloved Patrons! I’m here today with Chapter 7 or 4 of A burning Rose. (Clearly the author has a problem with numbering things.) What happened last time? Well, not much.

Our fearless thief AbR is flying to India to steal valuables from a temple in a misguided attempt to “give back” something to the poor of the area as well as “testing” the abilities of the agent in charge of her case. About an hour into the flight a man asks to sit beside AbR since a woman having a heart attack took his seat. This poor woman is never referenced again, so I assume she died and was fed to the First Class passengers as an amuse-bouche. This man, to absolutely no one’s surprise, turns out to be Edward Cullen (A.K.A. Munchkin) the detective (who is really a FBI agent) in charge of the investigations. AbR retreats to the bathroom only a few feet away, makes a phone call, and panics a bit before heading back to her seat.

Like previous chapters, this one picks up exactly  where the previous chapter left off; the entire fic reads like one exceptionally long chapter that was broken into smaller pieces. The title, “Chapter4A interesting flight” is nothing but a great, big lie – there is nothing interesting about this flight.

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