273: Flashback – One Shot

Title: Flashback
Author: S. McIntosh
Media: Book
Topic: To Kill a Mockingbird
Genre: Drama / Spiritual
URL: Flashback
Critiqued by Addicted Reader

Hello, dear readers.  This week, we’re going to take a look at a short alternate-character-POV fic from the To Kill a Mockingbird section.  This type of fic can be an interesting way to explore a canon scene by describing the action from a new perspective.  But as I’m sure you’ve guessed by now, this author does this poorly – otherwise, why bother to mention it here?

Let’s start with the summary, shall we?

Arthur Radley has been watching over his neighborhood for many years know, witnessing the growth of people, but when his time comes to help two of his neighbors, will he spring to action or ignore the calling?

So I bet you can all guess why I chose to look at this fic more closely.  But for those who aren’t quite awake yet, I’ll point it out:  homophone confusion and a run-on sentence.

There’s also the fact that this summary makes it sound like there’s some suspense, which there isn’t if the author is rehashing a canon scene.  Alternate-POV fics aren’t about suspense.  Having read the fic, I know that the author goes along with the canon scene, but you can’t tell that from the summary.  One more fail to add to the author’s tally.

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