2108: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school – Chapter 3

Title: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school
Author: otaisi
Media: Webcomic
Topic: Homestuck
Genre: Humor/Mystery
URL: Chapter 3
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags and Whirlybat von Flubbertybubble)

(Note: I promise the imitation-Homestuck formatting goes away in this riff and doesn’t come back. Apologies to those who were annoyed by it.)

I do Not Think it Means what You Think it Means count: 16

> BatJamags: Introduce the riff.

Huh? You’re not BatJamags.

> Who’s this douchebag?

Enter name, idiot.

> Enter name.

Your name is WHIRLYBAT VON FLUBBERTYBUBBLE.

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2102: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school – Chapter 2

Title: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school
Author: otaisi
Media: Webcomic
Topic: Homestuck
Genre: Humor/Mystery
URL: Chapter 2
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags)

I do Not Think it Means what You Think it Means count: 16

Riffstuck

Your name is BATJAMAGS. You’re an idiot with an internet connection. Truly, a rare specimen. You have a wide variety of INTERESTS, most of which are, much like you, IDIOTIC. One of these interests is MAKING FUN OF BAD FANFICTION. You are quite certain this is a productive use of your time.

> BatJamags: Write the riff normally.

No.

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2097: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school – Chapter 1

Title: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school
Author: otaisi
Media: Webcomic
Topic: Homestuck
Genre: Humor/Mystery
URL: Chapter 1
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags) and Whirlybat von Flubbertybubble

I do Not Think it Means what You Think it Means count: 11

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags…

Whirlybat: And I’m your guest host, Whirlybat von Flubbertybubble…

And we’re back with more messy readerfic! What fun!

Chapter 1

You sit at home in your bed. In your hands is a little white letter. Again. You read it over and over again. The same few words every time.

This is notable because letters are well known for having different content every time you read them.

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2091: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school – Prologue

Title: yandere gamzee x reader- the phantom of the school
Author: otaisi
Media: Webcomic
Topic: Homestuck
Genre: Humor/Mystery
URL: Prologue
Critiqued by BatJamags (BadJamags) and Whirlybat von Flubbertybubble

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with-

Whirlybat von Flubbertybubble: WHIRLYBAT VON FLUBBERTYBUBBLE STRIKES AGAIN!

You didn’t have to say your name. We can see it right there in your nametag.

Whirlybat von Flubbertybubble: Well, “I strike again!” wouldn’t be very cool, would it?

You say that like the thing you said was cool.

Whirlybat von Flubbertybubble: But it was ironic!

I’ll give you one thing; you’re a master of segues.

Since this is a fandom that hasn’t come up much on this website, I am left with the Herculean task of *shivers* explaining Homestuck. First, it is a thing. Second, the type of thing that it is, is kind of similar to a webcomic, and the word “webcomic” is really much more descriptive than the word “thing,” which is why I put that up in the “Media” spot.

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2085: The Shadow Warriors – Chapter 15

Title: The Shadow Warriors
Author: Shadow knight1121
Media: Comics
Topic: Justice League
Genre: Crime/Mystery
URL: Chapter 15
Critiqued by BatJamags (GoodJamags)

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another installment of The Shadow Warriors!

Last time, we finished up the chapter really early, so that was great fun. Oh, and something probably happened in the story, too.

Chapter 15: A New Villain

I’m sure he’ll be well thought-out and interestingly characterized.

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2080: The Shadow Warriors – Chapter 14

Title: The Shadow Warriors
Author: Shadow knight1121
Media: Comics
Topic: Justice League
Genre: Crime/Mystery
URL: Chapter 14
Critiqued by BatJamags (GoodJamags)

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another installment of The Shadow Warriors!

Last time, we learned that the best part of the story, Sarina Gibson, was in fact not the creation of our illustrious author, and I promised that I’d read the original story to see how much of her character arc is actually original. As it turns out, the author actually put a bare minimum of effort into this. The original story, Just for Laughs, is kind of mediocre (not a bad read, but somewhat lacking in pacing and technical ability) and the whole thing takes place inside Arkham Asylum. Basically the only thing that Shadow knight1121 directly reused was the recording that revealed everything. I’m not sure whether it explains some of the bizarre lengths Sk1121 goes to in order to keep the Dork Patrol involved, or makes it that much more confusing. Regardless, Sk1121 is still relying largely on someone else’s concept to make his story interesting, so no redemption cookies for him.

Oh, and I just saw that Sarina’s author has another fic (the original was based on Arkham Asylum, while this one is just Batman, and seems to reset the continuity) which is weirdly much better than the original despite only having been written eight months later. That one actually never got as far as the revelation, and it was last updated in 2016, so it’s safe to say that Sk1121 wasn’t ripping off that one either. It’s called Laughing All the Way.

Now, let’s get back to it, shall we?

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2073: The Shadow Warriors – Chapter 13

Title: The Shadow Warriors
Author: Shadow knight1121
Media: Comics
Topic: Justice League
Genre: Crime/Mystery
URL: Chapter 13
Critiqued by BatJamags (GoodJamags)

Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with another chapter of the fic that’s making me realize that seventy chapters is too many chapters. Let’s get started, shall we?

Chapter 13: One Thing left to do

Leave poor Ben alone!

Authors Note: Okay I should have mentioned this last chapter but most of the writing at the end I got from Tonycakes story Just for Laughs.

 You… “got it” from the story? What do you mean by that?

I’ll be back soon.

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