1862: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better – Chapter 3

Title: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better
Author: Beowulf the Novelborn
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/”Romance”
URL Chapter 3
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons!

As I mentioned in the comments last week, this fic updated recently with a new chapter. If you want to get caught up you can visit the first two chapters here  but the basics are as follows; the fic follows the ‘adventures’ of the intrepid Nero McGill, the grandiosely named son of a famous adventurer who was hired by Alterra for unspecified tasks after he committed minor crimes on their property, purely because his father is famous. I guess Alterra is big on brand recognition, or something. He is introduced into the fic when he goes outside of the spaceship in a modified wetsuit to both endanger people (who are out punching asteroids in mecha suits) and then save them. The particular person he saves, Lt. Jane Stalward, is a buxom young woman who later sneaks into Nero’s room to “thank” him by throwing her naked body at him. Repeatedly. Despite his apparent disinterest and intial reluctance, the two inexplicably enter into a relationship of sorts, although Nero thinks Jane is trying to trick him into staying with Alterra. I’m not sure why, since he does very little, but thankfully the ship is shot down by an alien gun before they engage in sexy times on-screen. There was a ‘tense’ run to the lifepods at the last minute as the ship was crashing, as Jane sacrificed herself by remaining on the ship so that Nero could escape and have a Dead Girlfriend™ Tragek Back Story.

Chapter 3: A Not-so-Warm Welcome

The Aurora‘s welcome to 4546B was very warm – on fire, even.

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1753: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better – Chapter 2

 

Title: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better
Author: Beowulf the Novelborn
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/”Romance”
URL Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

Hola, dear Patrons, and welcome to another chapter of Subnautica fic!

In the last chapter, which was full of asteroid-punching robots that were far less awesome than that sounds, we were introduced to Nero McGill, son of famed survivalist Craig McGill, who is himself a famous adventurer/explorer/survivalist/Stu. Nero, endangering the lives of everyone on the ship by interrupting an important asteroid-punching mission, saved Lt. Jane from possible death – but only after the aforementioned life-endangering interruption caused her to have an accident in the first place. Nero goes back to his room for some zero-G brooding set to eleventh century hymnal music, but is interrupted by Lt. Jane breaking into his room to give him a thank-you shagging.

Now that we’re sufficiently caught up, on to the fic!

Chapter 2: Brace for Impact

:grabs desk:

There better not be a Wall-o-Text heading my way, those things hurt like hell.

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1746: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better – Chapter 1

 

Title: Whatever McGill Can Do I Will Do Better
Author: Beowulf the Novelborn
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/”Romance”
URL Chapter 1
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to the start of a new fic!

This particular fic is also from the Subnautica section of ff.net, although written by a different author; I don’t typically do fics from the same source materials back to back, but I decided to make an exception this time. Let me show you the fic summary and I think you’ll see what drew my attention to this fic.

Nero is the trouble-sought son of the legendary survivalist, Craig McGill, and the young man’s most recent antics have landed him on an unplanned trip for Alterra, and smack dab in the middle of a romance with the ship’s Lieutenant. But when the Aurora crashes his new life, Subnautica has to learn the hard way that you don’t mess with a McGill.

Anyone want to play “Spot the Stu”? I’ll give you three guesses, and the first two don’t count.

I don’t even know what the hell ‘trouble-sought’ is supposed to mean. Is this guy trouble-prone, or a trouble-seeker?

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1740: Subnautica The Novel Chapter Bundle 4 … er, 5 is out – Chapter 5

 

Title: Subnautica The Novel (Chapter Bundle 4 is out!)
Author: CrashBurnGlobal
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/Mystery
URL Chapter 5
Critiqued by Ghostcat

:deep sigh:

So, thanks to SC, I have another chapter of this fic to power through. But after the author’s snit-fit in our comment section, the fic has apparently been deleted from ff.net so this is probably the very last chapter. So sad, much sorrow.

In the previous installment, Dumbass made it to Aurora despite not having the power reserves necessary without the PCC hand-delivering power cells to their feet (because whatever) and wandered around a bit before finally located the extremely important information that was needed to save Crazy Casey. Oh, and Dumbass has the incredibly lethal carar infection now but isn’t that concerned about it.

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1734: Subnautica The Novel (Chapter Bundle 4 is out!) – Chapter 4

 

Title: Subnautica The Novel (Chapter Bundle 4 is out!)
Author: CrashBurnGlobal
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/Mystery
URL Chapter 4
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons! Hope you’re having a great Good Friday, if that’s your thing.

This is the final (for now) chapter-lump! Hoo-ray!

In the last chapter-lump, which was actually just one chapter, Dumbass and Crazy Casey finally got to the island and decided to explore the dangerous alien wilderness in the dark. They did take the exosuit, which was smart, but decided to leave it and go on foot for most of their explorations, which was stupid. While exploring one of the abandoned Degasi bases, Crazy Casey fell and seriously fucked up her leg. She should have died while Dumbass ran back and forth to the Cyclops for a bit, but she only became conveniently unconscious so that Dumbass could heroically carry her back to the Cyclops – which is what he should have done in the first place.

Now, to the fic!

Chapter 11: Medical Attention

And again, starting exactly where the last chapter ended.

We made it onto the cyclops, she was still out cold in my arms.

And probably starting to get cold and a bit stiff, considering the amount of blood she’s lost.

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1728: Subnautica The Novel (Chapter Bundle 4 is out!) – Chapter 3

Title: Subnautica The Novel (Chapter Bundle 4 is out!)
Author: CrashBurnGlobal
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/Mystery
URL Chapter 1
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Howdy-do, Patrons!

Welcome back to another chapter of meandering fic featuring the “exciting” adventures of Crazy Casey and Dumbass. In the last chapter-cluster they imploded the Seamoth, found an exosuit, squabbled a bit, and managed to find a frickin’ island after weeks of being on the planet.

And now, on to the fic!

Chapter 10: The Floating Island

Which is once again picking up exactly where the last chapter left off.

“What…is…THAT!” I yelled in fear.

:shrugs:

Dunno. What are you looking at? Because all I see is the Void – and it keeps staring back into me, which gets very annoying.

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1722: Subnautica The Novel (Chapter Bundle 4 is out!) – Chapter 2

 

Title: Subnautica The Novel (Chapter Bundle 4 is out!)
Author: CrashBurnGlobal
Media: Video Game
Topic: Subnautica
Genre: Adventure/Mystery
URL Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons!

Welcome back to more Subnautical shenanigans; in the last cluster-chapter we met Dumbass, who spent several days alone in a lifepod before venturing out for a little sightseeing. Upon returning to the lifepod, Dumbass discovered that it was a different lifepod and was promptly bashed over the head, bound to a ladder, and threatened with a knife by the occupant. They are now besties and have built a base together. However, they have left the base in a Cyclops, which had not one but TWO dramatic reveals in a cave hidden by vegetation, and are now tootling around in the Void somewhere. Oh, and Crazy Casey managed to cobble together a two-seater Seamoth while they were onboard the Cyclops despite the fact that there would be no way for that to have happened.

And now to pick up where we left off!

Chapter 7: The Grand Reef

EXACTLY where we left off; the last chapter-bundle ended with a stray scene tag/ chapter title.

As soon as we dropped into the ocean, it was all black.

From what I remember, you two are in the jury-rigged Seamoth – maybe you should turn on the lights.

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