1829: Elsa’s Night at Freddy Fazbear’s Pizza – Chapters 1-5

Title: Elsa’s Night at Freddy Fazbear’s Pizza
Author: Christopher Spielberg
Media: Video Game/Movie
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s/Frozen
Genre: Humor/Horror
URL: Chapter 1
URL: Chapter 2
URL:  Chapter 3
URL: Chapter 4
URL: Chapter 5
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to another fic. This one is from my pile of short and strange crossovers; more specifically it is a crossover between Five Nights at Freddy’s and Frozen, because …. I don’t really know why anyone would cross those two canons. I picked this one from the half-dozen or so that were in that particular section, so let’s take a look at the summary to see what attracted my attention.

When a letter has mailed to Elsa in Arendelle, there is a job where she can get 150 a night. But when she gets there, she senses that something isn’t right with the pizzeria…

Right away I can spot some questionable grammar and a shaky premise, as well as the use of numerals in the narration. I assume this is going to be an AU fic, which is common in crossovers with very disparate canons, because why would a queen take a job in a pizzeria? There’s also a very high number of chapters in relation to the fic’s word count – a little over two thousand words spread over five chapters – and while there is no set chapter length this sort of disparity is rarely a good sign.

Let’s look at the fic!

Based on SMG4’s Mario/FNAF crossover.

This actually took me a bit of digging; I thought at first that this was another fanfic based off of a fanfic, but there is no fanfic author by that name on any of the main sites. Turns out that SMG4 is a channel on YouTube that does mostly mash-up videos, so this is a fanfic based on a YouTube video.

That’s promising.

(without bad words and inappropriate scenes; has alternative scenes with Frozen)

So not only is it a fanfic based on a YouTube video, but the author took out the “inappropriate” bits and bad language and added in a dash of Frozen instead. I don’t see how this could possibly go wrong.

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1765: The New Security Guard – Chapter 2

 

Title: The New Security Guard
Author: The Lazy Darklord
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: Hurt/Comfort
URL Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Welcome back, dear Patrons, to another chapter! When last we met, the audience was introduced to college freshman and extremely late bloomer Gabe/Michael via a pair of rambling and disjointed flashbacks that raised more questions than they answered.

On to the fic! Which starts with another all-bold Author’s Note that contains almost no punctuation. Yay.

Hello everybody and welcome back to the Fnaf fanfic,

Which so far has had very little FNAF in it.

some of you might be wondering hey dark why is it that you sometimes promise to finish a story and then you just disappear from the face of the earth for a few months,

No, I can honestly say I wasn’t wondering that at all. At the risk of resurrecting one of our favorite dead horses, you aren’t on a schedule. Post (or don’t post) whenever you feel like it. Your only deadline is self-imposed.

im not going to make excuses i honestly was at point were i was almost entirely done with fanfiction mainly because i did alot of work into my stories and then too rewrite them was an honest pain in my ass

Welcome to writing, honey – it’s two percent pure pleasure and ninety-eight percent soul-shredding grunt work that no one will ever see. And don’t even get me started on editing; it’s much easier to edit someone else’s work because you aren’t emotionally invested in it, but trying to edit your own writing is like having your fingers caught in a bear trap and trying to decide which one to gnaw off first.

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1758: The New Security Guard – Chapter 1

 

Title: The New Security Guard
Author: The Lazy Darklord
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: Hurt/Comfort
URL Chapter 1
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

Hello, Patrons, and welcome to a new fic!

This one is notSubnautica fic, but it does come from a video game source material – Five Nights at Freddy’s. There’s been a number of FNAF fics in the Library, so I will dispense with the usual SC-style info-dump and just move on to the fic – after taking a peek at the summary.

A college kid needs some work after his life goes to hell and his friends got the place and it pays pretty good for a pizza parlor

The grammar is wonky but that doesn’t sound all that bad…

(ok there will be sexual scenes and possible lemons and lots violence in the beginning and lots of cussing… I own nothing!)

And there we are.

Will make break off stories!

Those are typically called “sequels”, y’know.

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1675: Five Nights at Freddy’s x reader character x character oc x oc – Oneshot

Title: Five Nights at Freddy’s x reader character x character oc x oc
Author: Snake04398
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s (allegedly)
Genre: Horror/Fantasy
URL Chapter 1
URL Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat 

 

 

—TRIGGER WARNING—

—CONTAINS GRAPHIC SCENES INVOLVING SELF-HARM AND REFERENCES TO SUICIDE—

 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons!

Are you ready for another oneshot? And this one’s a Reader fic! From the Five Nights at Freddy’s canon!

:waits patiently for the screams to subside:

Now that you’ve gotten that out of your system, let’s move on to the first chapter.

It’s not really a chapter, though, just a long form of some kind.

Here is the form

See what I mean?

If it’s oc x oc (Do this for both of them)
Name-
Appearance-
Gender-
Age-
Personality-
Friends-
Enemys-
Other-
Plot-

If it’s character x oc

Name-
Appearance-
Gender-
Age-
Personality-
Friends-
Enemys-
Other-
Character (That your oc has a crush on)-
Plot-

If it’s character x character

Character 1-
Character 2-
Plot-

Now, I’m familiar with the standard abbreviations used in Reader fics (like [h/c] for hair color) but this is far more extensive. Not only is the author asking the audience to provide physical characteristics, but also things like their personality, their love interest, even an antagonist. The audience is, in essence, being told to write a full character and plot summary before they begin the fic. If the audience is going to do all of this, what’s left for the author to do?

It is quite telling that the versions for canon characters don’t ask for as much information, since presumably the only thing you need to describe a canon character’s personality and appearance is just their name.

On to the first and only chapter! It’s titled Bonnie x Reader-Loving you is suicide, which is setting off all sorts of alarm bells. Read the rest of this entry »


1638: help me – Oneshot

 

Title: help me
Author: icesukene
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: Romance
URL: Chapter 1
Critiqued by Ghostcat 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons, and welcome to my final post of the year!

And what better way to end the year than with a Reader fic! And it’s from Five Nights at Freddy’s!

:crickets chirp:

Too bad, I’m doing it any way. I took one look at the summary and knew this would be perfect for me.

this is a mangle x reader this is where you get with mangle yes mangle is a male in this and so is the reader yes it is yaoi please enjoy my story

…I know, I have questionable tastes in literature.

There has been quite a bit of debate among the FNAF fandom as to whether or not Mangle is male or female – very vitriolic debates in some corners of the Intertubez – to the point where the series creator, Scott Cawthorn, actually had to address the issue personally;

OK. People have been asking me about Mangle’s gender for almost a year now, and I think it’s time that I finally answer the burning question about whether Mangle is a boy or a girl, so that this community can finally put the matter behind them. The answer is- Yes.

I can’t really understand why anyone would be able to assign a gender to something that looks like this;

mangle

Especially since, as a robot, Mangle’s gender would be a matter of personal choice (assuming he/she/they/it is self-aware) anyway. Still, the idea of a non-binary character in a well-received work is pretty fantastic. Since the author of this fic is insisting that Mangle is male, I’ll be using male pronouns to refer to him.

(YOUR POV.)

:headdesk:

Great, a POV Tag. Why does a Reader fic, which are usually written in the second-person need a POV Tag? At least the author used the correct form of your/you’re for it.

:looks down:

And ninety percent of the fic is in bold and italics. :eye-twitch: Swell.

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1186: Big Hero 6 stay at Five Night’s at Freddy’s – Chapter 2

 

Title: Big Hero 6 stay at Five Night’s at Freddy’s
Author: Basilgarrad
Media:  Movie/Video Game
Topic:  Big Hero 6/Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre:  Supernatural/Mystery
URL: Chapter 2
Critiqued by Ghostcat

 

 

 

 

 

Hello, dear Patrons!

I’ve returned with the second chapter of this odd little fic. Not a whole hell of a lot happened in the first chapter – Solaris ate some pizza, discovered he was broke, and was offered a night watchman job by a waitress – so I’m not holding out much hope for this chapter.

It’s sad when an entire chapter can be summed up in a parenthetical statement. Let’s get to the fic!

 Night 2

Storming the Guardroom.

Wait, what?

When was Night 1? The last chapter ended with Solaris being hired but there was no mention made of him starting that evening. Even if he did, there’s a whole night missing!

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1178: Big Hero 6 stay at Five Night’s at Freddy’s – Chapter 1

Title: Big Hero 6 stay at Five Night’s at Freddy’s
Author: Basilgarrad
Media:  Movie/Video Game
Topic:  Big Hero 6/Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre:  Supernatural/Mystery
URL: Chapter 1
Critiqued by Ghostcat

Welcome once again, Patrons!

I’ve decided to continue with my recent trend of odd crossovers and dug this one out of my pile. It’s a crossover between one of my favorite animated films, Big Hero 6, and the wildly popular video game series, Five Nights at Freddy’s. They two do have some slight similarities; BH6 has a robotic character, and FNaF also has robotic characters (albeit murderous ones)  so these two canons do have slightly more in common than most crossovers I’ve worked on. Given the fics I’ve worked on, that isn’t saying much – but I’ll take what I can get.

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