2579: Mileena’s Humanity – Chapter Four

Title: Mileena’s Humanity
Author:  Spirit.of.Bardock
Media: Video Game
Topic: Mortal Kombat
Genre: Adventure/Romance
URL: https://m.fanfiction.net/s/11898341/4/
Critiqued by: ME-Iron-Maiden

WARNING: THIS INSTALLMENT CONTAINS AN EXPLICIT SEX SCENE AND THUS IS NOT SAFE FOR WORK. IT’S ALSO SHOWING UP IN THIS FINE ESTABLISHMENT SO IT IS ALSO NOT SAFE FOR YOUR SANITY IF YOU THINK ABOUT IT TOO MUCH.

Hello and welcome back to the riff of “Mileena’s Humanity”. I’m your host ME-Iron-Maiden and last time, we left off with our “hero” continuing to act like a douche rocket, Mileena suddenly having a breakdown and crying her eyes out and then acquiescing to sex with Ju’Stu. Ju’Stu, as you’ll recall tried to cave her skull in with a baseball bat, bosses her around, and force-feeds her shit that could well be toxic to her due to her unique physiology. So, of course, he’s “saved her life” and now she’s gonna bang him.

Before we begin, let’s post the current Darwin List for Ju’Stu.

  • Performed an unprovoked attack on Mileena
  • Isn’t afraid of the teeth she can easily use to rip him in half
  • Seems intent on pissing her off
  • Gives her weapons
  • Invades her personal space when she’s pissed off
  • Casually keeps his guard down around the psychotic cannibal
  • Takes a commanding/bossy tone with a woman who is known as the Mad Empress of Outworld for her sadism and brutality to her own subjects
  • Gets preachy with Mileena after finger-flicking her forehead

*opens a bottle of rocket-grade tihaar, sets the popcorn machine to overdrive, and cues up the porn music*

Let’s do this.

AN: Thank you everyone who was patient for this chapter, I had originally planned to work on this last week, but I was asked to house sit. This gave me the opportunity to do nothing, but play Overwatch (It’s addicting so shut up). Anyways, after this chapter things are going to start speeding up, cause remember this is technically still in the story mode of MKX.

You could have spent some time outlining what you plan to do with your story or at least figure out the characterization of the parties you’re dragging into your little fantasy here. And “start speeding up”? Dude, your avatar and Mileena have only known each other for ONE DAY and going to start banging. Not only is this incredibly fast (only “Mileena captures the OC as a sex slave” fics move faster), but your pacing is going to be rivaling “A Thorned Rose” at this point. This is not a good thing.

Justin carried Mileena into the bedroom and set her on the bed. She looked up at him with interest as he removed his shirt, revealing a muscular chest covered in scars. Her eyes went wide as she sat up and ran her hands over the scars.

Of course. This guy is built and scarred. Didn’t see that coming. And if you can’t taste the sarcasm, try licking the screen.

“W-what happened to you? Where did you get these?”, she asked concerned.

Justin looked at Mileena, “Well as I told you, I’ve traveled all over the world, which meant that there were times I hurt myself climbing or fighting off wild animal.”, he gestured to several bite marks.

And he’s apparently a badass, able to fight off wild animals or shrug off climbing-relate injuries. The wild animal thing is VERY egregious. Most animals that will attempt to take a human as prey are MUCH larger and stronger than we are (think Mountain Lion/Puma, bears, and so on) or they attack when you stumble across their young and they see you as a threat. Even a whitetail deer can rip you to shreds and trample you to death if sufficiently provoked. For once, can we get some kind of realism for a fic? Even Mortal Kombat has SOME standards!

Justin lift up Mileena’s face to his and kissed her, which got her mind off the scars and focused back on him. He slowly led her back onto the bed, using his hands to slowly rub her exposed stomach, causing her to get goosebumps. Justin then trailed down to the crook of her neck, kissing and nibbling at her making her blush and twitch and every bit of contact.

Mileena joked, “And I thought I was the expert in pleasuring.”, earning a chuckle from Justin.

“Well I’m no expert, I’m just doing what I think will make you feel good.”

Naturally, he’s doing basic shit but she’s acting like she’s never had even a modestly attentive lover in her life.

“The I must say your instincts are spot on, but now it’s my turn.”

Mileena grabbed Justin and flipped them over, she looked down him with a soft smile as she kissed him, being careful of her teeth. Justin reached up and wrapped his arms around her, bringing her closer to him. Mileena, meanwhile, was asking for entrance with her tongue, to which Justin allowed, interlocking his own tongue with hers. Justin could feel Mileena’s tongue wrap around his own as it was actually quite long.

Prehensile tongue? I guess I could see that, but I’ve never seen Mileena ever have that trait. And coiling her tongue around his could be a nice lead-in to her sucking that tongue between her teeth so she can bite if off and chow down.

  • Performed an unprovoked attack on Mileena
  • Isn’t afraid of the teeth she can easily use to rip him in half
  • Seems intent on pissing her off
  • Gives her weapons
  • Invades her personal space when she’s pissed off
  • Casually keeps his guard down around the psychotic cannibal
  • Takes a commanding/bossy tone with a woman who is known as the Mad Empress of Outworld for her sadism and brutality to her own subjects
  • Gets preachy with Mileena after finger-flicking her forehead
  • Makes out with the cannibal who has teeth that can tear a chunk out of a thresher maw

After awhile, Mileena broke the kiss and started to move lower until she got to the now clear bulge in Justin’s pants. She set to work, removing them and tossing them to the side as well as his boxers, revealing his length to her. Mileena chuckled as she wrapped her hand around it and started to slowly jerk him off. Justin let out a moan as he didn’t expect her hands to be so soft.

Bullshit. Mileena is a martial artist who regularly uses weapons. Her hands are NOT going to be soft. They’re going to be roughened with callouses from training and weapons handling. It’s a simple biological fact.  Case in point: take a look at this video of makiwara training featuring a rather petite woman doing the demonstration. Pay close attention to the shape her hands are in from the training she’s done.

[There used to be a video here, but it was pulled down due to a copyright strike. -The Mgmt]

Given Mileena likely trains MUCH harder than a normal human martial artist, I can imagine she’s got more than her share of scars and callouses on her knuckles. And that isn’t a bad thing at all. It adds to her character, in my eyes and confirms that she at least knows how to handle physical hardship after putting herself through that kind of training. It’s little nuances like that which can really make or break a portrayal. Pity our author here is more worried about using Mileena like a blowup doll.

*sighs and takes a shot*

Mileena looked at Justin and smiled, “I have to say, you’re quite well endowed with a gift.”.

“Well thanks, but I have to ask, are your teeth going to cause problems?”

Of course. He’s got a big cock. When are people going to realize that having a huge cock isn’t the best thing in the world? TV Tropes has an entire article dedicated to why “Bigger is better in bed” isn’t really the case. Short version: too big means you won’t fit, even if you do fit it’s likely to be very painful and she won’t get off, and other assorted issues.

*takes another shot but then re-reads that segment*

No. No way can he be that stupid.

She shook her head and proceeded to use her tongue to wrap around his dick. Justin could feel how warm and wet it was. Mileena grinned at the sounds that he was making as she continued to pleasure him. She continued to lick Justin’s length, getting faster as he kept making moans.

“Mileena, you weren’t kidding when you said you knew how to pleasure someone.”

He IS that stupid.

  • Performed an unprovoked attack on Mileena
  • Isn’t afraid of the teeth she can easily use to rip him in half
  • Seems intent on pissing her off
  • Gives her weapons
  • Invades her personal space when she’s pissed off
  • Casually keeps his guard down around the psychotic cannibal
  • Takes a commanding/bossy tone with a woman who is known as the Mad Empress of Outworld for her sadism and brutality to her own subjects
  • Gets preachy with Mileena after finger-flicking her forehead
  • Makes out with the cannibal who has teeth that can tear a chunk out of a thresher maw
  • Lets the cannibal give him a blowjob

That’s it. I reaffirm my nomination of Ju’Stu for a Sucktastic Award for “Character with worst survival instincts”

Mileena grinned and unwrapped her tongue from Justin, “Well then let me show some more pleasure.”.

She climbed over Justin and positioned herself over his length before slowly lowering herself onto it. Justin watched as Mileena began to moan in both pain and pleasure. He reached up to her and held her back for a bit.

“Mileena, is this your first time?”

She nodded, “Yes, but don’t worry about me, I can force myself through the pain.”

Ok. Hitting the brakes for an infodump.

Mileena is NOT a virgin in this timeline. At all. Want to know how I know this? As I alluded to in earlier installments, in the Mortal Kombat X comics (which ARE canon), she took Outworld General Reiko as her lover after he seduced her by treating her with kindness and in general treated her like a person rather than as a weapon or as a monster. At one point he bemoans being in her bed as he’s in a hurry to use the influence gained by being her consort to obtain the Kamidogu Daggers in an attempt to become a Blood God and rule over all the realms. So she was getting a little sumpin’-sumpin’ on a regular basis. Which further puts this whole “bang the guy who tried to kill me within 24 hours of meeting him” into pure bullshit territory. At best, she’d see this as a means to an end to keep him compliant. But the betrayal she went through was VERY personal (Reiko was her first lover and she was in love with him) and she’d be more inclined to use her sexuality as a weapon to get a mark to lower their guard so she can kill them.

Just before she escaped to Earthrealm in this fic, she learned she was being played by Rain who knew that her use of Shinnock’s amulet in her civil war with Kotal Kahn was killing her slowly and he planned to finish her off and lay claim to the throne afterward. In other words: SHE SHOULDN’T BE ANYWHERE NEAR THIS ENTHUSIASTIC! Mileena is already unstable by her very nature due to her Tarkatan blood. Add in the paranoia of having literally EVERYONE she trusted sell her out for their own gain and she should be trying to eat this guy or at least just give him a blowjob or handjob to get him smitten with her so she can use him for her own machinations.

Ok. Let’s move on before I get going too far into this rant.

Justin looked at her for a bit, but let go of her. Mileena then lowered herself further on Justin, making sure she went slow. Justin gripped the sheets as he felt the insides of Mileena seemed to twist around his dick, almost sucking on it. His hands went to Mileena’s breast, grabbing her attention to him. Mileena then reached her barrier as she looked at Justin, he nodded knowing that she was asking to continue. She forced herself down, yelling out in pain as she wrapped her arms around her lover as he did the same. After a bit, Mileena got used to the pain and started to ride Justin’s dick. Meanwhile, Justin had brought Mileena’s head to his and was kissing her deeply, causing her to blush wildly. Mileena continued to ride Justin, getting closer to her limit.

“Justin, I fell like I’m about to explode,” she said letting out moans.

“So am I, let’s see if we can do it at the same time.”

Justin grabbed her and rolled over so that he was now on top. Mileena looked up in surprise as Justin began to pump in and out of her quickly, sending pleasure throughout her entire body. After a while, Mileena grabbed onto Justin and moaned loudly as she released all over Justin’s thighs. Justin returned the favor by releasing his load into Mileena’s womb, then collapsing next to her panting.

… that’s it?

 

…wait a fucking moment.

*rereads the entire sex scene*

Did she even get undressed during all of this?

*goes back and re-reads the last couple chapters*

… I’m not seeing her undress at all. Nor are we given a description of the clothes she borrowed from Ju’Stu aside from “they’re comfortable” which I’m taking to mean he loaned her  t-shirt and sweat pants. So he just had penetrative sex with her through a pair of somewhat sturdy cloth. The image this plants in my brain can be summed up in two words: “Seven” and “Lust”. After I’m done here, I’m going to track down Syl and buy a bottle of the strongest beverage she has so I can scrub that imagery from my brain.

 “Well Mileena, your debt has been paid, so what are you going to do now?”

“I think I found a place to belong for once, I think I understand something I’ve been feeling. I think I’ve fallen for you Justin.”

Only in a Talimancer Special analogue will a sub-par dicking make a woman fall in love with the male protagonist.

“I could say the same about you Mileena, you’re a beautiful woman and I’ll do whatever I can to make you happy.”

“Anything, you say?”

“Yes….”

Mileena climbed on top of Justin, “Then I want to go again.”.

Justin chuckled, “You’re wish is my command Empress.”, he kissed her and got himself ready for round two.

“Refractory period? What’s that?”

AN: OK so I don’t make these chapters as long as others, I’m not that good with the lemons, but anyways. The story is going to start up, and also you will learn more about Justin’s back story. Be sure to check out my other fanfics and leave a review, Thanks.

If you suck at writing sex scenes, then either have them fade to the next scene, or go to forums for romance novel writers and read up on how to improve your abilities. Of course, that would require actual effort which I seriously doubt you’d be interested in going through.

That’s it for this installment. It was a short chapter so I was expecting to do 2 chapters at once. But since there was so much stupid shit going on, I had a lot of ammo to work with this time. I really am not looking forward whatever bullshit lies ahead, but at least I can point to this fic as further proof of my Badfic Theorem: “The number of stupid bombs in a fanfiction are inversely proportional to the length of the chapters in said work”.

See you next installment where we get to see more Stu traits on display and bullshit on a level that makes this chapter look like high literature by comparison. ME-Iron-Maiden out.


25 Comments on “2579: Mileena’s Humanity – Chapter Four”

  1. crazyminh says:

    *Opens site*

    Sees riff of the day

    *Pulls out bottle of Romulan Ale, unscrews the lid, and takes a liberal swig*

    Reads sex scene

    *looks at bottle, cocks head, and replaces bottle in drawer. Pulls open drawer, and pulls out a Hanar Mindfish, a Asari Jello shot, and a three litre bottle of Ryncol*

    If you’ll excuse me, I need to go clear my schedule for this week.

    • meironmaiden says:

      Thankfully this is the only sex scene in the fic.

      • crazyminh says:

        Oh good!

        *puts away Jello shot*

        • meironmaiden says:

          I’m afraid I have to issue a retraction. There’s at least one more sex scene in this fic… as part of a Christmas Special chapter.

        • AdmiralSakai says:

          There’s at least one more sex scene in this fic… as part of a Christmas Special chapter.

          Christmas Special chapter

          Oh, Lordy Lordy Lordy.

        • crazyminh says:

          *stares blankly into space*

          Imma going to need a whole lot more booze

          *Pulls out a four litre jug of Pan Galactic Gargleblaster, thirty bottles of Serrice Ice Brandy, and a massive tank full of Bloodwine*

          There we go.

        • meironmaiden says:

          If you want, I can tap some of the coolant from my ship’s main reactor loop. That should certainly help cope with this fic.

        • crazyminh says:

          *pulls out contraband engineering hooch*

          Oh no. This stuff should really make the icky painful fic just fade away. Along with half the room. Should I be feeling this numb?

  2. Zeus Killer says:

    Her hands are NOT going to be soft. They’re going to be roughened with callouses from training and weapons handling.

    *jots notes down for “characterization without words”*

    • meironmaiden says:

      Here’s the video I was talking about in the riff. Look carefully at the lady’s knuckles and you’ll see what I mean.

      • crazyminh says:

        Can confirm. I used to practice Taekwondo way back in High School, and my instructor had really worn down hands. I only got as far as a red stripe, but I remember that even the black belts who were training there had really worn hands. Taekwondo is one of the easiest forms of martial arts to learn, or so I’ve been told bt more experienced martial artists.

        • meironmaiden says:

          Karate is much the same way. Especially if it’s an Okinawan style since they do a lot of the makiwara training which is meant to build up the bones of the body to survive transmitting the same amount of energy as a .458 Winchester Magnum round at the muzzle (6000+ joules)* into a target. Most people are easily capable of generating more power than their bodies can reliably handle without injury, hence the training.

          * this comparison is based on measurements of some of the strongest punches I know I can throw without breaking my hand on impact

        • Em Kay says:

          Can also confirm this, although second-hand. When I met Mr. Kay, he was a Taekwondo student instructor and had insane callouses on his hands and feet.

        • meironmaiden says:

          I should note that having things like toughened knuckles and feet are mostly a trait of people who study striking-focused arts (Karate, Tae Kwon Do, and so on) with an emphasis on bare-knuckle techniques. Boxers and such who routinely wrap their hands and put on heavy gloves tend not to have hands like you’d see on old karate masters due to the wraps and gloves protecting their hands from damage which is also why it’s so common for boxers to break their hands if they have to fight without gloves for some reason. In fact, broken metacarpals (the bones in the hand itself) is known as “Boxer’s Fracture” for that reason and a broken 5th metatarsal (bone in the foot behind the pinkie toe) is called “karate foot” for similar reasons. Grapplers will also have toughened areas of skin due to friction from their clothing, the floor, rolling with their training partners, but it isn’t as obvious as it is with strikers.

    • meironmaiden says:

      Well, with the amount of bullshit in the next chapter, I’ve submitted my essay on How to Not End Up in the Library where I discuss the art of the fight scene while trying to keep things realistic/consistent. Give a bit of a primer before I flip my shit in pure Saiyan Rage.

  3. Zeus Killer says:

    “Refractory period? What’s that?”

    I’m guessing this world is actually a H-Novel spinoff, which is why we’re doing this shit.

    Would also explain the absolut BS when Liu Kang shows up…

  4. BatJamags says:

    making her blush

    I’m tempted to blow up again, but I feel like just being in the fic is bad enough.

    • meironmaiden says:

      Don’t worry. I’ll handle blowing shit up for this riff. This sex scene isn’t even close to the most bullshit bit in the fic.

      • Zeus Killer says:

        I’ve already requisitioned a fallout shelter for what comes up, popcorn not included.

        Just make sure you’re all practicing good hygiene.

  5. BatJamags says:

    Welp.

    That happened.

  6. Elysium16 says:

    Happy April Fools! Enjoy your one bit of serious content on the Internet.

  7. AdmiralSakai says:

    WARNING: THIS INSTALLMENT CONTAINS AN EXPLICIT SEX SCENE AND THUS IS NOT SAFE FOR WORK. IT’S ALSO SHOWING UP IN THIS FINE ESTABLISHMENT SO IT IS ALSO NOT SAFE FOR YOUR SANITY IF YOU THINK ABOUT IT TOO MUCH.

    So it has come to this.

  8. AdmiralSakai says:

    Justin looked at Mileena, “Well as I told you, I’ve traveled all over the world, which meant that there were times I hurt myself climbing or fighting off wild animal.”

    “Always the same wild animal all the time. It’s kind of creepy how it always comes back even after I throw it off a cliff or something.”

  9. AdmiralSakai says:

    Justin lift up Mileena’s face to his and kissed her, which got her mind off the scars and focused back on him.

    The rest of her head remained where it was, though.


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