2571: Mileena’s Humanity – Chapter Three

Title: Mileena’s Humanity
Author: Spirit.of.Bardock
Media: Video Game
Topic: Mortal Kombat
Genre: Adventure/Romance
URL: Chapter 3
Critiqued by: ME-Iron-Maiden

Hello everyone and welcome back to the riff of Mileena’s Humanity. I’m your host ME-Iron-Maiden and last chapter proved somewhat enlightening with regards to our “hero” Ju’Stu. For example, we learned that he has precisely zero survival instincts and is a total prick to one of Outworld’s deadliest fighters.

Let’s see what we have to put up with today.

AN: Ok sorry for taking so long with this chapter, a lot of stuff happened since the last one. Such as losing my laptop to the Blue Screen. And also thank you everyone that reviewed and faved this, to the reviewer who asked for a female OC x Mileena, I may get around to it. However since it’s almost summer, I’m going to be busy with stuff. A lot of which is Let’s Play and work.

Obligatory Author’s Note talking about random shit. I can also state with reasonable confidence that the FemSlash version of this fic doesn’t exist (at least on ff.net; I’m not searching AO3 to see if it’s there).

The sun poured in through the window, the light hitting Mileena in her face. She stirred a bit before sitting up, she looked at the room trying to take in where she was. After remembering about yesterday, she thought back to the debt she was going to repay today. Mileena moved the covers off of her and slid off the bed. After making her way into the kitchen she saw Justin cooking, a delicious aroma filled her nose.

“Nice to see that you’re up”, Justin said as he glanced back at her, “I’m fixing breakfast for us”.

“What are you making, it smells better than most of the royal meals I’ve had?”. Mileena sat at the table and watched him.

“Nothing special, just some eggs, sausage, and bacon. Complete with some homemade biscuits.”, Justin finished up with the eggs and placed the plate in front of the empress.

She took an experimental nibble at them and widened her eyes before devouring them completely. She then dove into the bacon and sausage, leaving next to nothing on the plate. Justin watched as Mileena cleaned off each and every plate as if she hadn’t eaten in days.

Again with the simple bachelor cooking somehow beating out the Royal Kitchens in Outworld. Don’t get me wrong, bacon is amazing but I still call bullshit on all of this. Furthermore, what is all this cooked food doing to Mileena internally? Nearly every time we see her eat, she’s eating her food raw. And then we have the biscuits which might play hell with her physiology due to her being pretty much a carnivore, what with her being half-Tarkatan. Seriously, this guy might just end up getting her killed if this keeps up.

“You know there is such a thing as moderation, you can slow down to enjoy your food more.”, Justin said as he ate his own breakfast.

Ok, Mileena. You can stop playing nice and turn him into a Tasty Treat any time now.

Mileena glared at him, she always ate like this, but this was because of the Tarkatan blood in her. Justin went back to his plate, Mileena stood up quickly and sent a snarl at Justin. He simply retaliated with a glare to her, causing her to back off a bit. Mileena made her way outside to look around, off in the distance she could see what she remembered to be a city.

You. Have. To. Be. Shitting. Me.

Why the ever-living fuck is Mileena backing down against this punk? She’s angry enough to be snarling and flashing teeth at him, but him glaring back at her is enough to hold her at bay? Absolute bullshit.

“Enjoying the view Empress?”, Justin asked as he came outside as well.

“Not really, just remembering when my father invaded this realm. I came along and killed many humans, which felt amazing to feel their blood slide down my skin. It was cool, but yet warm at the same time, and the cries of them as they died were like music to my ears.”, Mileena turned to Justin, about to continue tales of her victims when she was stopped by a flick to the forehead.

“Mileena, I am a human and I don’t like hearing about times you’ve killed my kind. There’s a lot more to life than just taking other lives.”

She really should be gnawing his hand off while he screams in agony for that. In the old days (and Outworld likely runs on this rule), laying hands on the Sovereign without their permission is punishable by death. This isn’t Mileena. This is a sapient blowup doll that merely looks like her.

  1.  Performed an unprovoked attack on Mileena
  2.  Isn’t afraid of the teeth she can easily use to rip him in half
  3.  Seems intent on pissing her off
  4.  Gives her weapons
  5.  Invades her personal space when she’s pissed off
  6.  Casually keeps his guard down around the psychotic cannibal
  7.  Takes a commanding/bossy tone with a woman who is known as the Mad Empress of Outworld for her sadism and brutality to her own subjects
  8.  Gets preachy with Mileena after finger-flicking her forehead

“Don’t start trying to turn me to the ‘good side’ as soon as I repay my debt, I will leave here..”

“And go where Mileena, face it, you’re an outcast from your home. Just like me.”, with that Justin went back inside the house, leaving a confused Mileena behind him.

Run-on sentences, shit punctuation, and sudden edge. Of course this edge is dull and weak at best. On the other hand, this prick is arrogant enough to equate his isolation to be equal to being on the run under an active death warrant since Kotal Kahn hasn’t agreed to spare her life if she remains exiled. If she doesn’t eat this jackass, maybe she can at least use him as a meatshield when D’Vorah shows up to finish the job.

She watched him as he went back into the house, confused on why he called himself an outcast. However he was right about one thing, she was an outcast, unable to even go home. She let out a sigh and went back in to see Justin next to some parchment with a pad of colors in front of him.

“What are you doing?”, she asked him as she stood behind him.

“Just some painting, I do it in my spare time to just clear my mind.” He gestured to the various framed paintings that decorated the walls.

Mileena looked around and inspected them, they were incredibly lifelike. It was as if they were simply windows, she looked at all the different landscapes in each one.

Oh, now he’s a master painter as well? The wonders of the Stu never end!

Why are there some many different kinds?”, she asked as she continued to look.

“They’re all places I’ve been, the world is a big place Mileena, and most of it is devoid of humans.”

“I’ve been wondering about that, why are you so far away from humans. I thought your kind liked to stick together.”

Justin shrugged, “I’m not what you may call ‘a people person’, I like my solitude just fine”.

So Ju’Stu lives alone, not because of exile, but because he chooses to? This guy is a total ass for comparing his living situation with Mileena’s.

An hour goes by and Justin put the brush down, rubbing his shoulder. Mileena having decided to try and watch TV. got up from the couch and placed her hands on his shoulders. Justin tensed a bit, but soon relaxed as Mileena started to massage him. He looked back at her and saw something new, Mileena’s expression was soft, almost peaceful. He let out a sigh as all of his tension soon left his body, Justin stood up and turned to Mileena.

Good. She’s setting the trap. Shouldn’t be long now!

“Since when are you a masseuse? I thought an Empress wouldn’t need to know that kind of thing.”

“I was made to be the perfect combination of beauty and deadliness, so one thing that was put into my memories was the knowledge of how to pleasure a man. This combined with my strength meant I could seduce anyone, then rip them to shreds.”

“You’re getting too into it again.” Justin warned Mileena again.

No she isn’t! She’s not getting enough into it! It’s obvious by the fact you’re still alive!

“My apologizes, anyway do you feel better”

“Yea, you did an amazing job, thank you.”

Justin smiled at Mileena, causing her to blush for the first time in her life. His smile seemed to brighten the entire room and push off any bad feelings. Mileena looked away from him and went into the bathroom to splash water on her face.

“Get a grip on yourself, you can’t be falling for a human. Could I? No, no I’m not, even though he has shown me nothing, but kindness after knocking me out”

Ok. Full stop here. We got some shit to discuss.

In the new Mortal Kombat timeline that started with the 2011 reboot, Mileena is shown as a woman who is very lonely and is starving for affection. When she woke up after being “born”, her own sister denounced her as an abomination and tried to kill her. With the exception of Shao Kahn, no one ever treats her with kindness or affection and Shao Kahn only does so when she’s demonstrating a particularly brutal method of executing a target. Instead they either are terrified of her or disgusted by her appearance which is why she flaunts her body while hiding her face; it’s a coping mechanism as well as a weapon.

In the Mortal Kombat X comic (which is canon to the main storyline), Mileena is seduced and falls for Outworld General Reiko who treats her as a person and shows her kindness and affection. He also was using her to help get into a position where he could attempt to become a Blood God at which point he would kill her and take over all the realms. When she found out, she took the Wrath Hamer (her father’s signature weapon) and beat him to a pulp with it, waited for his newfound powers to revive him, then beat him to death with the hammer again. Given that the first man she took as a lover (that we’re aware of) betrayed her in such a fashion and she’s on the run for her life, I seriously doubt she’d be falling for Ju’Stu here. Especially since it’s been less than 24 hours since they met.

Further evidence of Mileena’s craving to be loved is shown in Kitana’s Mortal Kombat 9 Arcade Ladder ending. In that scenario, Kitana spares Mileena’s life and offers her a home as her sister. Mileena cautiously accepted, found the offer was genuine, and latched onto Kitana as a beloved sister. Together with Jade, the three of them would become champions of the light and ensure no other warlords like Shao Kahn would go unchallenged.

So this fic’s premise is actually quite feasible given what we know of Mileena as per the Mortal Kombat canon. The problem here, however, is the execution is insultingly bad. Let’s tally up what Ju’Stu has done for her. He’s tried to cave her skull in with a baseball bat, bosses her around, ignores her personal boundaries and wishes, foists food on her that could prove toxic, and insults her by equating his chosen isolation from society at large with her fleeing for her life with no allies to aid her and no resources to fight back. But we’re somehow supposed to buy that she’s falling for him in less than 24 hours?

Moving on.

Justin looked at the bathroom door, confused on why Mileena was acting so strange, but then shrugged and went to cook some lunch. Mileena stepped out and could smell some food being cooked, she made her way to the kitchen to find Justin boiling something in a pot.

“Have you ever had spaghetti?”

“No, what is it?”

“Well, it’s noodles that are topped with sauce and meatballs. I made sure to make the meatballs big, cause you’re more interested in eating that.”

Again, I’m compelled wonder if her body can tolerate such foods.

Mileena nodded and went into the living room to wait. For some reason her mind was going through many different emotions, most of them she didn’t know what they were. She kept going over everything that has happened since yesterday, and the more she thought about it, the more it hurt her. Finally she couldn’t handle it anymore and broke out into tears, causing Justin to put the food on hold and see what was wrong. Justin sat next to her and put a hand on her shoulder.

“What’s wrong Empress, I thought you were above crying?”

She sent a growl at him, “Shut up, I’m not crying….”, she put her face back into her hands and continued sobbing.

Justin hesitantly brought his arms around her, but then decided it needed to be done. He brought her into a hug and ran his hand through her hair as she cried. He figured the pain she was going through was the final acceptance of her life. Justin looked at the woman in his arms, she looked so different without the scowl and angry demeanor, she was quite beautiful.

Kinda fast for her to be having a breakdown like this, isn’t it? Knowing her personality, she’d more likely be in a rage from the frustration rather than bawling her eyes out…


This is leading into a lewd scene, isn’t it?

“Mileena, I know this is hard for you, but you have to trust me on this.”

She looked up at Justin, “Trust you on what?”, she asked confused.

“I will provide you shelter here, this can be a new life for you. I’m not gonna lie, you’re starting to grow on me and I don’t want you to leave.”

Mileena sat up and looked at him, “Why would I stay here, I just want to repay my debt…”.

“Shut up about the stupid debt!”, Justin yelled out, growing tired from her talk of a debt.

Mileena jumped at the sudden increase of his voice, “Why, it’s the only reason I’m staying here, give me one reason why I should.”.

Justin stayed quiet for a few seconds before moving forward and planting a kiss on Mileena’s lips. The empress froze at this, but slowly relaxed into it. Justin wrapped his arms around her waist and brought her closer. After awhile Mileena broke off from the kiss, putting her forehead against his.

“What about our meal?”

Justin chuckled as his eyes seemed to flash, “I’m about to have a meal of my own.”, he stood up with Mileena in his arms and started his way to the bedroom.

How predictable. If this fic had ANY semblance of faithfulness to established canon, Mileena would be the one about to have a meal. Seriously. This guy is just a flat-out pretentious prick without any real likable qualities to him from what we’re shown of his personality. About the only good thing I can say about him thus far is that he isn’t a flat-out psychopath tryhard like Kye-Stu was.

AN: I have to ask everyone to please give me time for my fanfics. I’m trying to get these typed up as fast as I can. Anyway, please review, fav, and follow as well as checking out my other stories.

Oh, you’ll be getting a review, alright. Just give me time and I’ll see how many times I can max out ff.net’s review character limit. Right now RockJumper holds the record at 2 posts being require to fit everything I had to say. Once I get further along, I’ll get right to that review.

Well, that’s it for this chapter. ME-Iron-Maiden out.

16 Comments on “2571: Mileena’s Humanity – Chapter Three”

  1. AdmiralSakai says:

    to the reviewer who asked for a female OC x Mileena, I may get around to it.

  2. AdmiralSakai says:

    Mileena stood up quickly and sent a snarl at Justin.

    I am imagining her tossing it in the air and hitting it with a tennis racket.

  3. AdmiralSakai says:

    Mileena looked around and inspected them, they were incredibly lifelike. It was as if they were simply windows, she looked at all the different landscapes in each one.

    That was a creepypasta that DubiousDugong ripped off, actually.

    • Zeus Killer says:

      Yeah, he is.

      Short version: A Hunter goes out into the woods, finds a cabin, and decides to stay the night. He noticed that there were a lot of portraits with life-like faces…but they were scowling for some reason. His exhaustion got the better of him though, and he fell asleep.

      When he woke up the next morning, he realized something-the paintings were missing… or rather, he finally saw the windows clearly.

      It’s known enough to be featured in a Teen Titans Go parody apparently.

  4. AdmiralSakai says:

    “They’re all places I’ve been, the world is a big place Mileena, and most of it is devoid of humans.”

    While in a purely volumetric sense that is indeed true, it’s actually pretty hard to get to a place on Earth any more where humans cannot be seen, heard from, or quickly summoned if need be.

  5. AdmiralSakai says:

    “Well, it’s noodles that are topped with sauce and meatballs. I made sure to make the meatballs big, cause you’re more interested in eating that.”

    Bow chicka bow wow?

  6. Em Kay says:

    Justin chuckled as his eyes seemed to flash, “I’m about to have a meal of my own.

    If you’re making your readers physically cringe, it’s not sexy.

  7. BatJamags says:

    By the way, I did read this, it’s just everything that happened in this chapter was either repetitive of or entirely predictable from the last one.

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