Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
URL: Chapter 20
Critiqued by BatJamags
It Doesn’t Matter.
Uwaah count: 13
A Sentence Fragment count: 123
Roll Call count: 7
[Sidenote: So, you know how I’ve been making all these DC Comic crossover jokes? Yeah, apparently Warner Brothers bought out Rooster Teeth and DC is now set to make an official RWBY adaptation comic. I WAS RIGHT!]
Hello once again, patrons! I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with more of this fic. Last time, Yang and Jaune were still hot on Sueby’s trail, and Sueby was about to recruit some Creeps and Goliaths to her menagerie. My understanding based on author’s notes is that literally all of these previous five chapters, including the one for today, were added to accommodate those two new species of Grimm. So let’s dig in and get this over with, shall we?
Despite however much either wanted it, Ozpin could not send the Bullhead to pick them up, leaving Yang and Jaune to spend the night in Tinker, with a flight prepared for the morning.
He can’t send the Bullhead… why, exactly?
Figuring it was better than nothing, the two of them decided to spend the night in the room they had already paid for.
Wait, they paid for a night more than they were planning to spend?
When he got inside of them room, Jaune immediately took to putting the information into his Scroll, something that looked odd to Yang.
Adding notes to your phone? Weird, man.
But she didn’t question it. In fact, there were only two questions on Yang’s mind: When would she get to see Ruby? And when does she get to kill whoever tried harming her? It doesn’t matter who they were, and that was honestly what Yang felt. There would be no force on the face of Remnant who would or could stop Yang in her quest for her sister. Nothing at all.
Nothing at All Can Stop a Sentence Fragment count: 124
But that was something for another time. For now Yang reasoned it would be better to head back to Beacon, just as Jaune did. The two may be hellbent on trying to find Ruby and bring her home safely, but they also realized that certain things wouldn’t happen immediately. Plus, Jaune saw something in all of the information they’ve gathered, and apparently he had a plan. One that Yang was unaware of.
So, hang on, let me get this straight. Ruby’s almost certainly lost it and become a mass-murdering Grimm beastmaster who could try something stupid that’ll get her killed at any point, and you don’t consider finding her your main priority?
Mysterious Sentence Fragment Plan count: 125
All Yang was entirely aware of was the fact that the moment Jaune had used his authority as a hunter of Beacon to get that information from the city guards, the look in his eyes changed. If Yang had to describe it, it looked like he’d just won the lotto or something. Something he’d pieced together from everything they’d found so far seemed to have Jaune eager to get back to Beacon, even at the cost of riding in an airship, something he hates with a passion.
Get it because he got motion sickness in the first episode WHY AREN’T YOU LAUGHING.