2324: The Purple Queen – Chapter 6

Title: The Red Queen
Author: Dravyn LeCrux
Media: Web Series
Topic: RWBY
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 6
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Hello once again, patrons, and Happy Cinco de Mayo! Yesterday was Star Wars Day, and two days from now is my birthday, so I expect virtual cake. Speaking of me (and I do love to speak of me), I’m your host, BatJamags, and I’m back with more of The Red Queen, home of Sueby Rose and Weissome McSchneevil!

Last time, Yang was angry about stuff and tried to kill somebody who was badmouthing Ruby for no reason, Sueby got new pets, and McSchneevil narrated to herself about her own evilness.


It was a quiet day at Beacon, as usual Classes had already been let go,

Man, those classes have really let themselves go. They should probably cut back on the junk food.

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