2089: The Power of Thee – Chapter 1

Title: The Power of Thee
Author: FariyFlare
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: Adventure
URL: Chapter 1
Critiqued by Ghostcat




Hello, dear Patrons!

I was thinking to myself, “You know what I haven’t done recently?”

:Syl’s voice drifts down from the rafters:


I’m ignoring you. Anyway, I was thinking to myself “You know what I haven’t done in a while? A Reader fic!”

“Bollocks to this.” :drops down from the rafters and heads for the door: “I’ll be at the pub.”

Calling the janitor’s closet a pub doesn’t make it one, but whatever.

So, back to the fic. Unlike many Reader fics, which struggle with the format for a single chapter, this one actually stretches over several chapters. There’s still a lot of struggling, but now it has been greatly expanded, so there’s that to look forward to.

Let’s take a look at the summary, shall we?

Y/N and her/his friends are big fans of the renown horror game, Five Nights at Freddy’s. They bet every game including the extra nights that were thrown at them, they pretty much everything about the game. But one night, Y/N and her/his friends find out about something that they don’t know what to think of. Freddy Fazbear’s Pizzeria was right down the road. (My 1st reader insert)

Right away I can tell the grammar is going to be an issue. And the fic is apparently going to be in the frequently annoying first-person rather than the eye-bleeding second-person, so that’s a mixed blessing.

Now, to the fic!

Brace yourself, Whirlybat, I think you’re in for a rough ride.

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