Title: Five night’s with Foxy and Mike
Media: Video Game
Topic: Five Nights at Freddy’s
Genre: none given
URL: Chapter 2 part 2
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Critiqued by: Ghostcat
Hello, and welcome to the last installment of this constant parade of uncomfortable situations. Despite the author’s warnings, the last chapter did not include any penises being inserted in places that they aren’t usually inserted, much to my associates’ displeasure. The Salacious Sisterhood has since decamped to go on an epic quest to find out where Shinobi-san hides the really explicit manga, so I’m all by my lonesome now.
Mike awoke to the sound of an alarm going off.
I think that means you need to reset the systems, but I’ve never been able to pinpoint where in the timeline this is supposed to be taking place.
“What in the fuck” he groggily turned over in his single bed, pulling his phone from its spot on his bedside table.
Is the phone his alarm, or is this just an unrelated action?
His head throbbed with the sound, and promptly, he opened and clicked it off.
…Does he have a flip phone? As I’ve just stated I’m not sure exactly where in the timeline this is supposed to take place, but the bulk of the action takes place in the late 1980s to the mid-1990s. A flip phone would be at the very edge of that time estimate, but those didn’t have the same features found in today’s ubiquitous smartphones. I’ve owned flip phones, and I don’t remember them having an alarm function.
He was still tired from been up all night and then sleeping all day.
He’s tired from sleeping all day?
I don’t think Mike understands how sleep works. Or he took one of those really deep naps where you can’t remember what planet you’re on when you wake up.
He remembered that, as soon as he came home to his apartment he had passed out on his bed. He barely remembered how he even got here.
Meh. It’s probably not important. Much like everything else in this fic.