1565: Aquamarine – One Shot

Title: Aquamarine
Author: CutePichu64
Media: Cartoons
Topic: Steven Universe
Genre: None given
URL: Aquamarine
Critiqued by KittyNoodles

Hello, Patrons! Kitty here, this time with a quick and hopefully completely squick-less oneshot from the Steven Universe fandom!

For those of you who either haven’t heard of this show or have avoided-slash-missed out on watching it for various reasons, Steven Universe is a cartoon show that aired its first episode on November 4, 2013 (it aired its pilot episode online on July 27, 2013.) It’s basically about a magical boy named Steven Universe who lives with magical shapeshifting lesbian rocks from space (called Gems) and who is part magical shapeshifting lesbian(?) rock himself due to his mother deciding to become part of him, since no two magical shapeshifting lesbian rocks can have the exact same gemstone (which is their actual body, while their people bodies are projections.)

Above: Amethyst’s far-off model (with whip) against a closeup of her gem. The far-off model is a representation of her projected form, which she - like all Gems - can change at will; the gemstone acting as the background is her real body.

Above: Amethyst’s far-off model (with whip) against a closeup of her gem. The far-off model is a representation of her projected form, which she – like all Gems – can change at will; the gemstone acting as the background is her real body.

Throughout the series, Steven and his surrogate moms – Garnet, Amethyst, and Pearl – go on a series of adventures, most of them mundane and centering in his hometown of Beach City, but many also outside of Beach City and concerning extremely important Gem business.

Mostly containing corrupted Gems like this thing up here, which was presumably once a people-Gem like all the other named Gems.

Mostly containing corrupted Gems like this thing up here, which was presumably once a people-Gem like all the other named Gems.

The main storyline is basically that the Crystal Gems were involved in a war over Earth millennia before the start of the show; the Gems’ Homeworld and rulers – the Great Diamond Authority – planned to make our lovable little blue space-marble into a Gem colony, destroying all organic life on it and hollowing it out as they gradually drained all resources viable for creating and ostensibly sustaining Gem life.

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Shown: The ultimate fate Homeworld planned for the Earth.

Fortunately, Rose Quartz – Steven’s mother and the original leader of the Crystal Gem rebellion – fell in love with the Earth, and after gathering enough like-minded Gems to her cause she waged war against Homeworld, eventually driving the loyal Gems away. She lost all but two of her followers in the process, and later on during a shutdown of a Gem Kindergarten (it is not a school, I promise you, holy god it is not a school), discovered a leftover, runty quartz soldier named Amethyst and added her to their group.

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Amethyst’s now abandoned and nonfunctioning Kindergarten. Anyone else getting an Enigma of Amigara Fault vibe? (If you don’t know what that is and are easily terrified, DO NOT CLICK THAT LINK.)

Fast forward. Rose falls in love with a human man named Greg and shapeshifts to give herself a functioning womb so that she can conceive a son. As I mentioned before, she can’t pass on her gemstone or any genetic (geo-netic?) traits to Steven without essentially literally becoming the half of him that Greg’s DNA didn’t cover.

So she does. Too bad all three Crystal Gems loved her a whole lot.

And Pearl romantically loved her a whole lot. Whoops. (Don’t worry, kids; this is just fusion. I’ll cover it later. It’s magic lesbian space-rock sex.)

And Pearl romantically loved her a whole lot. Whoops. (Don’t worry, kids; this is just fusion. I’ll cover it later. It’s magic lesbian space-rock sex.)

Now the Crystal Gems are on constant alert for any return by the Homeworld Gems, and by the time of my writing this, basically Homeworld has indeed reappeared. So far, the Crystal Gems have avoided being outed to the Diamonds, who would undoubtedly launch a new attack on the planet to hunt down the Crystal Gems and destroy the world out of pure spite, but they’ve picked up a pair of formerly Homeworld-loyal Gems in the process. The first of these is Peridot, antagonist-turned ally and resident gigantic nerd with zero people skills.

Peridot as an antagonist and as a… well-meaning protagonist.

Peridot as an antagonist and as a… well-meaning protagonist.

Their latest recruit – and equally as unwilling as Peridot initially was – is Lapis Lazuli, who was cracked, mistaken for a Crystal Gem, stuck into a mirror to be interrogated, abandoned during Homeworld’s retreat, picked up by the Crystal Gems, and eventually freed and healed by Steven.

She doesn’t always have wings. But when she does, they’re made of water and somehow still capable of flight. Don’t question it.

She doesn’t always have wings. But when she does, they’re made of water and somehow still capable of flight. Don’t question it.

ANYWAY.

Since I recently got completely hooked on Steven Universe, I decided it was high time to do a Steven Universe riff.

Our fic today is titled “Aquamarine,” which is coincidentally a popular fan name for the thus far theoretical fusion of Pearl and Lapis. I think the reason these two are shipped so much is frankly because they’re both water-related Gems. Lapis controls and draws power from water, and Pearl is… well. She’s a pearl. Which comes from a clam or something. [Oyster, although most any mollusc can actually produce the proper coating that creates a pearl, which is initially just a bit of irritating grit that got stuck in the oyster.  All a pearl is, is the inner-material of the mollusc shell layered many times over a grain of sand.  Fancy, eh? – Lyle] Which is a water creature. So there you go. Not a ship that I ship, personally, but hey, to each their own.

As always, we should first focus on the summary.

Pearl is romantically interested in a certain gem, Lapis Lazuli and wants to fuse with her. Lapis has been having problems of her own trusting fusion, will Pearl help? pearlxlapis

Frankly I can’t see Pearl ever becoming romantically interested in anybody other than Rose, but again, that’s just me. I’m more interested in the fact that this is more or less the Steven Universe equivalent of a “fix rape by having sex with the victim” scenario.

Fusion, in the Steven Universe… universe… is when two or more Gems dance (or, as they call it, synchronize) with each other and through the act of harmonizing their thoughts and movements become a larger, single, brand new entity.

Yes, you did just see Amethyst dive into Garnet’s groin headfirst.

The point is, whether CutePichu64 realizes this or not, this story is already shaping up to be a “sex fixes rape” fic, because Lapis only fused with Jasper – who, despite being far stronger and larger, really couldn’t force her to synchronize because that’s just plain impossible – to contain Jasper for as long as she could, thus protecting the Crystal Gems (but really only to protect Steven) from Jasper.

That’s Jasper’s introductory scene, and no, she doesn’t get better after this – she gets worse. Do you want a Gem like Jasper running about unchecked? No, you don’t. So Lapis basically used space rock lesbian sex to keep Jasper contained for as long as she could, trapped first in a shared body over which Lapis had primary control and then by Lapis’ water-based powers, which kept the fusion pinned at the bottom of the ocean as long as Lapis remained in control. Since Gems don’t need to sleep, eat, or breathe, this did no damage to the fusion’s physical health.

By now, of course, the fusion, known as Malachite, has been defused and Jasper has literally vanished into a crack in the ground, thus freeing Lapis to very, very grudgingly join up with the Crystal Gems.

Long opening short, I don’t have very high hopes for this fic. It already stinks just like the Naruto fanfiction I wrote when I was thirteen, just with a less sinister premise.

But maybe I’m being judgmental. Maybe this story far outmatches its summary. Maybe it’s a really good, thoughtful story about Pearl and Lapis just having a talk about fusion and feelings and past trauma!

DISCLAIMER: I DO NOT OWN ANYTHING ABOUT STEVEN UNIVERSE AND ITS CHARACTERS

No need to shout.

Pearl has found new romantic interest since Rose Quartz, Lapis Lazuli. But with this interest comes great desire, fusion. But Lapis isn’t ready for it, after Jasper and Malachite, is she really up for the challenge?

What the fucking fuck? Is this a goddamn second summary in the middle of the damn fic? Pichu, what the balls, man?!

Okay, I know I’m really hitting hard on the whole “fusion is sex” thing, but in the Steven universe that’s exactly what fusion is for Gems. It is constantly presented as a beautiful, harmonious thing, carried out between two or more Gems in a moment of perfect singularity and maintained through complete harmony if not pure love for each other. The only exceptions to this rule so far have been the Ruby fusion we see in “The Answer” – which was made up entirely of Rubies, so that’s just all the same Gem deciding at the same time that they need to whoop ass – and Malachite, the latter of which only happened because Jasper wanted to kick ass and Lapis wanted to kick ass, but Jasper wanted to kick Crystal Gem ass and, although she thought Lapis also wanted to kick Crystal Gem ass, in reality Lapis wanted to kick Jasper’s ass in the only way she could: By imprisoning her within an unstable fusion.

Fucking – I just… Look, here’s the Malachite fusion sequence, I’m sorry, I know it’s yet another visual aid, don’t watch if you can’t stomach veiled rape references.

If that didn’t send at least a couple of red flags up in the “this is not consensual” direction, I don’t know what could. And to make things better, in the most recent episodes Jasper took control of Malachite and the pair of them had to be violently separated!

Here is the equivalent scenario playing out in my mind: After a bit of smooth talking, Jasper attempts to go after Lapis, only for Lapis to get in a few good kicks and swings. But then, having been biding her time until Lapis wore down, Jasper suddenly leaps up, overpowers Lapis, and eventually must be ripped off of Lapis.

That’s it. That’s the equivalent scenario to Lapis losing control of the already unhappy Malachite fusion. That is, according to everything the show has told and shown us about fusion, the actual human equivalent to what Lapis has been through prior to this fic.

Now keep that in mind and reread the part about fusion just being a [violent finger quotes] “challenge” for Lapis after something like that.

Lapis Lazuli sat on the beach shore, her feet entering the ocean peacefully. Now she was a Crystal Gem, she might as well as stay on this cruddy Earth with them. But deep down the Ocean Gem’s shards, she knew the real reason she became a Crystal Gem was to spend time with Pearl.

Oh, go fuse with yourself.

Lapis does not like any of the Crystal Gems. They knew she was a Gem trapped in a mirror and used her as a tool for millennia, then actively tried to prevent Steven from freeing her! She hates them as much as she hates Jasper! And she and Pearl interact… what, once, one-on-one? And they were attacking each other at the time and said nothing directly to each other. I’m not saying you can’t make them have a closer relationship; I’m just saying you can’t fling it at us in a one-off sentence like it’s a spoonful of baby food.

Secondly, “down her shards?” So, what, her gemstone has been shattered? That’s the only true way to kill a Gem. Why not say “in her core” or something that sounds less like she’s been literally shattered?

She hummed a tune and looked far into the ocean, beauty was what she saw.

What does everybody have against the Sammy the Semicolon? He just wants to give you longer, more profound sentences; I don’t understand why nobody uses him in fanfiction anymore.

I get wanting your prose to match up with a particular rhythm or syllable count in your head – lord knows I do it constantly – but at least make sure you aren’t sacrificing grammatical or punctual correctness in the process. Otherwise you get sentences like this one that just sound like you’re trying too damn hard. Which you are.

Until memories came flooding back in. Jasper… fusion… Malachite… ocean… struggle… that long time she spent under her beloved water body, trapped as that fusion with the Gem abomination, Jasper, protecting Steven. Lapis kicked away from the water and held her knees close to her blue skin and darker blue hair.

I mean, that’s not the worst show of character panic I’ve ever seen, but it’s still an incredibly robotic display.

And “water body.” Put the thesaurus down and back away slowly.

Pearl sat next to her and greeted warmly, “Good morning, Lapis, a fine day to look at the ocean?”

Where the fuck did you come from?! Did Pichu forget a few sentences? That’s too goddamn sudden, Pichu! You’ve got abruptness, sure, but I mean… nothing? At all? Is this still from Lapis’ point of view? If so, how did she identify Pearl’s voice so quickly if she really did appear so suddenly? Shouldn’t there be a sort of “mysterious person makes the ptsd episode even worse by being sudden and unsubtle” vibe here?

she looked at how Lapis’ face tensed up at the mention of ocean. Her mouth slightly tilted from straight to a frown.

Who’s mouth? Pearl’s? I’m assuming it’s Pearl’s because apparently we’re now in Pearl’s point of view (this is a really badly done game of point of view tag, by the way.) Also, I’m pretty sure Lapis has been… uh, frowning from the second she thought of the Malachite fusion.

Lapis looked at Pearl as tears swelled up in her big blue eyes. “Lapis?” Pearl called.

She’s right there! Why are you calling for her? She’s like… a foot away from you, tops!

Lapis burst out sobbing, she rested her head on Pearl’s chest and continued crying, “I can’t stop thinking about it! My ocean, one of my most prized possessions, is even reminding me of it!”

Uhm. Lapis is being very… fragile, here. I mean she’s prone to fits of desperate rage, but she’s not really the wailing puddle of person type. When she was trapped in a ship that was crash-landing on Earth and could very easily have exploded and shattered her gemstone in the process, her reaction was to fold her knees to her chest and put her head down in defeat. That’s about as close to actively weeping as she has come in the entire show so far. Usually she gets angry at whatever’s bothering her and yells at it or attempts to kill it. Or both. Right now she shouldn’t even want to be around anyone else.

Pearl pat her gem and sighed.

First: Patted. Pat is, in this sentence, supposed to be a verb. It should be treated like one.

Second: A lot of fanart depicts the actual gemstone as being like the Gem clitoris in terms of sensitivity to touch. While this isn’t canon, it is weird that Pichu either isn’t aware of this or isn’t using it. You know, considering the extremely unfortunate implications of this fic.

Lapis had gone through a lot, so really, it wasn’t the right time to pop the question.

What question? Ignore both summaries and tell me any of you has any idea from the prose itself what Pearl wants to ask. You can’t, can you? You know why?

Because this is not how you build suspense or drama.

That said, having read both summaries, points for having Pearl act like a decent person and respect that Lapis is in no way ready to attempt fusion again.

Lapis noticed the display of disappointment and concern on Pearl’s light face, “Pearl… what’s wrong?” she asked, wiping her own tears.

I take back those points. Stop being openly disappointed, Pearl; this isn’t supposed to be about how much you want to bone Lapis space rock-style. If you really care about her, you will be content with that and enjoy her company in the meantime.

KINDA LIKE YOU WERE WITH ROSE.

“Nothing,” Pearl assured her with no tone. Her darker lookalike stared at her in disbelief, Lapis was not buying it at all. Pearl looked away and fixed her peach hair and sighed, “OKAY, Lapis Lazuli, I wanted to ask you, to fuse with me, but…” Pearl paused to see Lapis’ face, “You aren’t ready… not after your traumatic experience, so I understand…” Pearl said seriously and lifted herself off the ground.

Did you just guilt-trip the Gem-equivalent rape victim about not being emotionally ready to fuse with you right now?

Also… Pearl and Lapis look nothing alike. I mean, besides being similarly long-limbed and having pointy noses…

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“Pearl… I didn’t mean to let you down like this,” Lapis apologised sincerely and got up.

Did you just apologize for “letting Pearl down” because you aren’t emotionally ready to fuse again?! Pichu! Shave your neck once in a while!

I’m not even going to keep apologizing about repeatedly hammering on this point anymore, because even Pichu is playing fusion as Gem sex, for Christ’s sake! In the sense that this reads exactly like a fix rape with sex fic!

I need to get a signature weapon to destroy things with. My bare hands are calloused from months of paperwork, but they are not strong enough to destroy furniture on their own.

She held Pearl’s long white fingers in her pale blue hands. She looked into Pearl’s baby blue eyes with her dark blue eyes. “I just can’t… Jasper is still in my head and Malachite… what can I do?” she asked her appearance sharer.

YOU LOOK NOTHING ALIKE.

AND GODDAMMIT STOP APOLOGIZING FOR BEING REASONABLY TRAUMATIZED FROM A HORRIBLE EXPERIENCE THAT YOU STARTED WITH THE BEST OF INTENTIONS AND WHICH WENT HORRIBLY OUT OF CONTROL DUE TO JASPER BEING A MONSTER.

Pearl hugged Lapis and sighed for the first time, “I don’t know. I’m just a common Pearl like Peridot said, I only take orders.” Pearl broke the hug and held Lapis in her arms, “I’m sorry you have to live with it forever…”

HAVE YOU EVEN WATCHED “FRIEND SHIP” PICHU OR ARE YOU JUST WORD VOMITING NOW?!

For those of you who don’t know, in the Steven universe, Pearls are made-to-order servants for high-ranking Gems, most notably the Diamonds. Basically, a Pearl’s main purpose in life is to stand there and look pretty and maybe perform whatever menial tasks their masters give them. We’ve even seen a bit of evidence in the show that the more attention, interaction, and/or autonomy a Pearl is granted by her master, the more she develops her own personality: Blue Diamond’s Pearl never says a word, only moves a tiny bit from her pose (and then only once,) and shows no real emotion or even reaction to anything going on around her. Yellow Diamond’s Pearl, meanwhile, is a mouthy twat who’s very obviously a play on every asshole secretary stereotype in the book, but still submits to and slobbers after Yellow Diamond with all the reverence of a devout worshipper.

Our Pearl – or really Rose Quartz’s Pearl, because let’s face it: that’s who Pearl was and will always be in the end – is excruciatingly loyal to Rose, to the point that she defends the Earth explicitly because she wants to fight “in the name of Rose Quartz and everything that she believed in,” and is strongly implied to protect and nurture Steven largely (if not entirely) because he’s Rose’s son-slash-reincarnation. She has already proven herself more independent than either of her aforementioned counterparts in that her personality, while extremely Rose-centric, is developed enough that she was willing to actively antagonize and attempt to discourage Greg (Steven’s dad) from forming a romantic relationship with Rose, even though Rose fully reciprocated his feelings.

Rose’s Pearl was willing to undermine her “master’s” relationship. Yellow Pearl and Blue Pearl would never dream of that, largely because they’re both still so dependant upon their respective owners for any sort of personality at all. Rose’s Pearl – our Pearl, the Pearl in this story – was already far more autonomous than any other Pearl thousands of years before this story began. She was still extremely lock into the idea of being expendable because of her Gem type, but Pearl is already over the whole “just a Pearl” thing by the time Malachite is unfused! She and Garnet hash it out during “Friend Ship” and then Pearl herself finally accepts the fact that she is her own Gem and not anyone’s servant during the much more recent “Back to the Barn!” What the hell are you doing, Pichu?! And I mean besides rewriting an entire season of character development for Pearl!

“No,” Lapis scolded her and held her closely and tightly, “You aren’t a common Pearl. The Diamond’s pearls are different from you,” she removed hair from Pearl’s sad struck face, “You’re a special Pearl, a Crystal Gem Pearl… please help me forget the past… forget Malachite… forget… Jasper…” she then turned to a whisper from the request.

The rape unwilling-fusion victim is comforting the pushy neckbeard fusion-obsessed Gem by offering her body for sex fusion. And asking for sex fusion as a means of forgetting an abusive ex-lover former fusion counterpart’s aggressive rape takeover of a previous fusion.

Gladly, Pearl took her hand and turned her around, “Let’s fuse,” she said before they turned to a united separate dance.

That’s a really stupid way of saying they stepped apart so that they didn’t come into contact with each other during their dances until they were completely synchronized.

Both dancing, their gems began to glow brighter and brighter, as they got nearer to each other. When they got the right moment, Lapis ran into Pearl and jumped on her, Pearl caught her and flipped her over. Lapis’ slender body bent over, letting her gem touch Pearl’s forehead gem. Their long triangular noses touched before white mass of energy covered them, revealing a giant woman.

Uh… somebody just broke her neck. I think it was probably Lapis, whose gemstone is on her back. I’m also not entirely sure what the hell they did before that. Near as I can tell, Lapis did the ballet equivalent of a belly flop at Pearl, who caught her, swung her around into a dip, flipped her onto her stomach, touched gemstones (ohh myyy~) and then flipped her onto her back again to brush noses with her.

You know, you guys could have just done a quick portion of a routine of, like, Swan Lake. Probably would have made more sense.

The fusion looked at itself in wonder, “Wow, this feels… different…” she murmured excitedly. She gasped in awe as she looked at her new body. White skin, the Pearl and Lapis nose,

They have. Different. Schnozzes. Pearl’s looks like a cracked-out three-year-old drew it, and Lapis’ looks like an anime-esque upturned button nose.

with long sky blue hair and dark blue eyes. She had four white arms from her body. She wore a navy blue tank top with a yellow star on the middle and a navy blue flowing skirt, with yellow shorts on the inside. An aquamarine was on her forehead and back.

I can’t find any fan drawings that match those colors, but I did find a similar one in terms of overall description on Uncle Google.

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If this is in fact the design the writer is basing their description off of, it’s not an outrageous design. And if we look at my horrendously bad and completely uauthorized edit (with apologies to the original artist), even the colors aren’t atrocious:

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When we look at canon two-Gem fusions (Malachite, Garnet, Rainbow Quartz, Sardonyx, Stevonnie), we do sometimes see a blend of the component Gems’ colors – Garnet is a dark bluish-red, and is composed of Sapphire and Ruby, who are colored as you might expect; Malachite is shades of green and is comprised of Jasper (an orange Gem) and Lapis. This may not extend to the fusion’s clothing, however – Sardonyx’ outfit is shades of dark maroon, despite Pearl having pastel yellow and blue and Garnet favoring black for their respective outfits.

In short, if we are imagining this fusion as illustrated above, this fusion’s appearance is almost spot-on. The only thing that’s off is the fact that the number of this fusion’s eyes hasn’t been mentioned – all fusions so far (barring Stevonnie, who’s a fusion of half-human Steven and full-human Connie) have had at least four eyes, and at most six. Although I guess with Stevonnie in the mix, it’s not entirely unlikely that a two-Gem fusion comprised of two full Gems would have two eyes…

“Wow, we’re… I’m…” the fusion stammered, “Aquamarine.”

I’m not really sure whether or not it’s canon that fusions always immediately know what kind of Gem they are. Garnet makes it sound like she had no idea at first, but Malachite was the first character to actually use the name ‘Malachite’ on the show.

I do know the way it’s handled here is annoying because that’s not how people talk. Or the anthropomorphic space lesbian rocks, for that matter. That’s bad enough for me.

“WHOA!” Steven cooed in excitement at Aquamarine, “Pearl… Lapis? Who are you now?! Wait till I tell the others!”

WHERE THE HELL DID STEVEN COME FROM?!

PICHU! NONE OF THESE CHARACTERS CAN TELEPORT AT WILL! KNOCK THIS SHIT OFF!

“Cool! Pearl and Lapis fusion in the house son!” Amethyst shouted from afar and met up with Steven. She grabbed his head and drilled in the big brown hair.

I think we just watched Amethyst kill Steven… by shapeshifting her hand into a drill.

Jesus.

Amethyst looked up to Aquamarine and smirked, “So have you kissed or what?”

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Okay, Amethyst is generally the token “bad girl” of the Crystal Gems, but I’m having a very hard time believing that would be her first question after seeing Pearl and Lapis fuse. She’d probably charge back into the temple (where the Crystal Gems all live) and grab Garnet so she could watch Garnet’s reaction.

Garnet loves seeing new fusions. As long as they’re born of healthy consensual partnerships, anyway.

“Kissed?” Aquamarine repeated and put the lower arms on her hips. Her other arms dug into her two gems and brought out a sharp boomerang, her watery wings blossomed out of the back gem, she made an intimidating look at Amethyst “Amethyst, you troublemaker!”

Aquamarine has an incredibly short fuse. Also, no fusion has ever needed to delve into both/all of their gemstones to retrieve a single weapon, though pulling one’s weapon from a single gemstone is a canon-proven method of doing so, best displayed by Pearl and Amethyst. Additionally, Lapis’ water wings never need interaction with Lapis’ hands – they sprout at will. It would make much more sense if Aquamarine were to pull the boomerang from her forehead gemstone at the same time that her wings sprouted from the one on her back, thus leaving two hands on her hips and one free to do whatever.

“I wasn’t looking for any trouble,” Amethyst shot back defensively and but her arms up. She watched Garnet emerge from the sea and look in shock, the good kind.

Why in the fuck is Garnet emerging from the ocean? Has she taken up deepsea freediving? Whatever, Garnet’s the only one who’s had anything resembling a halfway decent introduction into this fic since we opened on Lapis.

Garnet looked up at Aquamarine and smiled. She called Amethyst and Steven to her sides, and introduced them, “Crystal Gems, that is Aquamarine,” Aquamarine bowed down and did a plie.

Garnet, you don’t need to introduce them. I’m sure Aquamarine can manage that on her own – although I’m guessing this bit here is coming from Garnet being the first Gem to call Stevonnie by their name in-universe (confidently, at least – Amethyst is actually the one who coins it first, but in a very stiff, uncertain tone since she doesn’t know exactly what to call them.) Apparently Pichu thinks this means Garnet is the resident fusion-introducer…?

“Ugh… she still dances like that…” Amethyst said with annoyance and smugly looked away, snorting.

Amethyst is surprisingly rude about this. By this point in the show, she and Pearl have largely worked through their major differences with each other and Amethyst and Lapis haven’t had much interaction beyond that one time they fought right after Lapis was freed from the mirror. Even at the time this riff was written, I haven’t seen any real interaction between Amethyst and Lapis, so I’m not really sure who Amethyst is supposed to be this irritable with right now. She’s pretty laid-back unless she genuinely dislikes or has an issue with somebody. She was psyched about Stevonnie, and didn’t really know Connie very well by the time Stevonnie first came about.

“What can you do Aquamarine,” Steven asked her but she was gone. The remnants were Pearl and Lapis holding each other in the arms with smiles on their faces while breathing in and out slowly.

Wouldn’t somebody have noticed the flash of bright white light that accompanies a willing defusion? And why are Pearl and Lapis now in a position that makes it look as though they were doing some meditative exercises while they were fused? Usually a good fusion ends with its components looking and sounding a lot like they just woke up from a very refreshing post-coitus nap.

No, I’m not kidding. I would put a movie up to prove it, but I think my editor may already be planning to kill me. Does the Library have a media limit on posts…?

“Thank you, Pearl,” Lapis Lazuli smiled proudly at Pearl and watched a bit of light blue blush spread on her face.

Lapis is smiling proudly at Pearl? Wasn’t Lapis the one who needed the “encouragement”? Shouldn’t Pearl be feeling proud of her?

“Y-y-you’re welcome,” Pearl stuttered and went deeper blue, she grabbed Lapis’ waist and whispered to her, “I really enjoyed our fusion,” she said watching Lapis’ cheeks flush night blue. They both looked at Steven’s anticipating and miserable eyes.

I’m not sure Pichu remembers which one of these Gems was supposed to be the one recovering from a horrendous past fusion. Pearl’s stealing Lapis’ lines and the two-bit personality she was assigned at the start of this fic!

They walked to him and dragged him into a hug, “Someday Steven, you will see her again,” Lapis assured and looked at Pearl. Pearl nodded to her and hugged Steven tighter, “Someday,” Pearl added.

Steven looked into the sky and closed his eyes, he just looked into the sun, “I know, Aquamarine, I will see you again,” he replied to their assurances. But for now, Aquamarine stayed at the romantically interested, Pearl and Lapis Lazuli.

Why is Steven talking to a fusion who is no longer present? Successful, healthy fusions tend to have their own unique personality, which can be influenced by their components, but aren’t usually a conglomeration of their components’ personalities. Fusions are essentially the “children” of their component Gems in that regard.

And why does Pichu appear to have the disturbing notion that romantic and sexual attraction are mutually exclusive things? They do realize it’s possible to have both romantic and carnal feelings for someone at the same time, right? Or are we seeing hints of why they think it’s perfectly acceptable to fix rape unhappy fusion trauma with guilt trip-induced sex fusion?

I kind of got bored to the end so don’t blame me. I hope Lapis actually turns out okay so she and Pearl can hook it up! Read and review please.

-CutePichu64

Yeeeeep, it’s the latter. I’m going to say Pichu is probably in their teens and is really only interested in the sexual fusion-related aspect of their OTP’s hypothetical relationship.

And Pichu, I do blame you for getting bored and letting your boredom show through your writing. I also blame you for being so transparently interested in the fusion and only the fusion that you rendered this entire thing the Steven Universe equivalent of porn without plot fanfiction. If you’re going to post something for others to read, you owe it to yourself as a writer and to your prospective audience as readers to post something to which you remained wholly committed and in which you poured all your talent, time, and effort. If you don’t do that, you do not have the right to expect anyone to forgive you for posting second-rate scrapwork as a finished, read-and-review-worthy piece. It’s a tough lesson to learn, and every fanfiction writer – every writer of every type and genre – has to learn it at some point. The sooner you learn it, the sooner you will begin to improve your writing and the faster you will harden yourself to negative but constructive reviews.

You say on your profile that you dislike mean and snobby people. I’ve probably come across as both of those things. I usually do when I see somebody who I think has potential and seems to be making no effort to tap into it. I’ve been my usual noisy, foul-mouthed, detail-stickler self here, and here’s why: I really do think you do have potential. You write a lot like I used to write when I was thirteen and fourteen. Like me, you need to learn how to harness that potential – all of it – and produce work that you can honestly say you’re proud of having written. All of my early stuff was garbage, and I desperately wish to burn it, but I can honestly say that I am proud that I took the time to go through it and do my best with the knowledge and energy I had at the time to make what I perceived, at the time, to be my best work. And I’m most proud of the pieces where I made no excuses for any sloppy writing based on my mindset at the time of the writing. You need to get around to that same point – and it’ll be tough to do, habits are hard things to break – and when you do, I really hope you’ll revisit this fic. I think if you work hard enough, you can take a story like this and make it well worth coming back to for a reread.

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23 Comments on “1565: Aquamarine – One Shot”

  1. AdmiralSakai says:

    It’s basically about a magical boy named Steven Universe who lives with magical shapeshifting lesbian rocks from space (called Gems) and who is part magical shapeshifting lesbian(?) rock himself due to his mother deciding to become part of him, since no two magical shapeshifting lesbian rocks can have the exact same gemstone (which is their actual body, while their people bodies are projections.)

    And this is supposed to be entirely squick-free.

    Riiight….

  2. AdmiralSakai says:

    her appearance sharer.

    What the hell kind of term is that?

  3. AdmiralSakai says:

    “WHOA!” Steven cooed in excitement at Aquamarine, “Pearl… Lapis? Who are you now?! Wait till I tell the others!”

    WHERE THE HELL DID STEVEN COME FROM?!

    PICHU! NONE OF THESE CHARACTERS CAN TELEPORT AT WILL! KNOCK THIS SHIT OFF!

    He was watching the whole time.

  4. AdmiralSakai says:

    “Cool! Pearl and Lapis fusion in the house son!” Amethyst shouted from afar and met up with Steven. She grabbed his head and drilled in the big brown hair.

    I think we just watched Amethyst kill Steven… by shapeshifting her hand into a drill.

    No I think she just installed a large hair in his skull… with a drill.

    That’s arguably worse.

  5. AdmiralSakai says:

    “Crystal Gems, that is Aquamarine,” Aquamarine bowed down and did a plie.

    A what now?

  6. BatJamags says:

    I was going to make a joke about how the Steven Universe fandom seems way too concentrated on all the weird sex the aliens have, but I’m a Homestuck fan, so I really have no room to talk.

  7. Andiliteman says:

    need to get a signature weapon to destroy things with. My bare hands are calloused from months of paperwork, but they are not strong enough to destroy furniture on their own.

    Ooh. I have a few things lying around that you might like… Just, uh, be careful where you point the pink one. It packs a punch.

  8. Andiliteman says:

    If you’re going to post something for others to read, you owe it to yourself as a writer and to your prospective audience as readers to post something to which you remained wholly committed and in which you poured all your talent, time, and effort. If you don’t do that, you do not have the right to expect anyone to forgive you for posting second-rate scrapwork as a finished, read-and-review-worthy piece.

    I’m going to paint this on my bedroom wall in 3-inch letters.

  9. Andiliteman says:

    I’ve heard of Steven Universe in the past, and have considered watching it myself… Reading what you have to say on it… It sounds weird.
    Well, I like weird. I think I’ll try it.

  10. Jon Arbuckle says:

    “When they got the right moment, Lapis ran into Pearl and jumped on her, Pearl caught her and flipped her over”

    And trapped her in the deadly Walls of Jericho submission hold!


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