1234: The Legend of Dragoon: The Eighth Spirit – Chapter Thirty

Title: The Legend of Dragoon: The Eighth Spirit
Author: PhoenixofShadows
Media: Video Game
Topic: Legend of Dragoon
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure
URL: The Legend of Dragoon: The Eighth Spirit
Critiqued by TacoMagic and Swenia

The writing is getting strangely erratic so far as length is concerned.  It seems that every other chapter is far, far longer than the one sandwiched between.  This is unfortunately one of the longer ones.

“It’s probably due to the author basing the chapters on which area of the game the group has traveled to rather than a more reasonable plot-based determination.”

Oh sure, use logic.

“Last time they played with gravity for a while, the blob fought another Virage and won without any real effort on their part, and then the fic spiraled further down into the realm of sexism.  Pretty bare bones, but then, most of this fic has felt bereft of content.”

Even so, I think you’ll be excited for today’s installment because we’ll finally be going to:

Chapter XXX: The Home of Gigantos

“Hellooooo, manmeat parade!”

Sadly, there’s only one left.

“I’ll make him do laps.”

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