141: Control – Chapter Three

Title: Control
Author: Jckash03
Media: Television / Movie
Topic: Dragon Ball Z
Genre: Suspense / Romance
URL: Control – Chapter Three
Critiqued by Lyle
Submitted by Blessed8be

Welcome back dear patrons of our humble house of snarkdom.  Today I’m going to take on chapter three of the DBZ fic “Control.”  To recap the “action” to this point, Pan (a character whose age has been grossly miscalculated by the author to a sum of 10 years older than she’s supposed to be) has run away from home for reasons unspecified other than that she needed her space from everyone she knew.  No one knows where she’s gone.

In the meantime, Trunks proves to be the worst older brother ever and Yamcha proves to be the worst babysitter ever, as both men leave a 4 year old unattended (and bleeding) in a bathtub.

And that pretty much sums up the entirety of chapter two.  This is riveting stuff, isn’t it?  Let’s see what sort of fun chapter three has in store for us!

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