136: Control – Chapter Two

Title: Control
Author: Jckash03
Media: Television / Movie
Topic: Dragon Ball Z
Genre: Suspense / Romance
URL: Control – Chapter Two
Critiqued by Lyle
Submitted by Blessed8be

Hello!  Welcome back to the timesquiggle known as “Control,” a Dragon Ball Z fanfic that seems to have neglected to do any research regarding character ages.  To summarize the previous chapter, a group of DBZ regular characters are meeting to have a BBQ and the shit hits the  fan when it’s discovered that Goten’s niece, Pan, is in a “secret” relationship with Goten’s best friend Trunks.  I say “secret” because apparently Goten is the only one who didn’t know this beforehand.  The biggest, most blaring mistake the author has made thus far is assuming Pan is around the same age as Trunks and Goten (15 – 16), when in canon she is really ten years their junior (5).  Fun!  Considering this is never going to get addressed, I’m just going to ignore it and go with the author.  Otherwise this entire thing is going to be me ranting about age inconsistency.

Also, there’s some creepy incestuous pedophilia vibes flying around so make sure you strap a helmet on today.  We’re going to be doing a lot of ducking.

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