Title: Protective Secrets
Author: bim-bam58
Media: Manga/Anime
Topic:  Fruits Basket
Genre: Romance/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 16
Chapter 17
Critiqued by Ghostcat

Welcome once more, dearest Patrons! Today is a very special day – it’s the end of the fic!

:wipes away tear:

I do so enjoy these days.

The last chapter continued the grand tradition of being almost completely pointless; Tohru convinced her ardent admirer Michael to help her, got the basics of Chris/tian the Asshat’s daily schedule from him as well as a bit of his own back story, formulated a cunning plan (which has yet to be revealed) to destroy the evidence, only to be thwarted by her inability to just walk down the hallway to the room. Instead of coming up with a variation of the “guard escorting prisoner” gambit, which would have been really easy to do since she’s a real prisoner who has a real guard helping her, she waited for the Sue Force to deliver the most contrived means of travel possible – a wheeled table covered in a plain white tablecloth.

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 Title: Protective Secrets
Author: bim-bam58
Media: Manga/Anime
Topic:  Fruits Basket
Genre: Romance/Tragedy
URL: Chapter 13
Critiqued by Ghostcat

Welcome once more, eager Patrons! I have yet another chapter of FB goodness in the pipe, but before we venture into the great unknown that is Chapter 13: And so it Begins … let’s go over what happened last time.

:flips through notes:

Once again, I have to say “Not much.” Kyo and Yuki found out Shigure and Tohru were missing and freaked out, Shigure came back home within minutes of this discovery with an absurd story to explain Tohru’s absence, and Tohru assaulted a man on the train with the fictilicous (it’s a word now) Vulcan death grip. For being the longest chapter yet, there sure wasn’t a lot happening.

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Hello, my splendid Patrons! I’m here once again with another chapter of my FB fic, this one titled Search and Ride.  There’s yet another chatty Author’s Note in the beginning that doesn’t add anything to the fic, so I’m just going to skip over it; in fact, there are several portions of this chapter that I’m going to summarize to keep this riff at a managable length as it has the dubious distinction of being the longest so far. It’s actually more like two short chapters squashed together.

Not a whole lot happened in the last slice of failure pie; Shigure took Tohru to the train station, cried like a little girl, and then returned home.

Now that we’re all caught up, on to the chapter!

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