464: From Another World – Chapter 9 Part 2 and Chapter 10

Title: From Another World
Author: EclipsePheniox
Media: Video Game
Topic:  Mass Effect / Parallel Realities
Genre: Supernatural/Romance/AU
URL: From Another World Chapter 9 and Chapter 10
Critiqued by Erttheking

I’m giving Ert my spot again this week since I’m visiting with Lyle and have not had the opportunity to write anything.  Back next week with more resident evil: reborn.

-Taco

I got called into work unexpectedly, so odds are this won’t be up for another week.  Christ I’m bad at this.  Ok, the last chapter ended with Ash and Shepard trying to be romantic but instead coming off as horny.  So naturally we’re going to cut to the assault on the Cerberus base right?

 Aria the queen of Omega looked over the main dance floor shaking her head. Everyone tried to get in her panties but she only had room for one person. She then turned to an OSD in her hand and gave an evil smile at the image on it.

If you did think that, I suggest you use your brain cells on something that actually deserves your intelligence.

I’ll take them.

 Commander John Shepard had that rare fire that burned like a black hole inside him. The Asari ice queen always liked that. She walked over to her bed took off her cloths and fell on it. It had been a long day she needed the rest. As she laid there a memory crept into her mind. As the memory lingered in her mind her hand made it’s way to in between her legs.

 No….no….please tell me you’re not honestly going down that path.  Please tell me that you have more intelligence and class than a thirteen year old who just discovered boobs.

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456: From Another World – Chapter 8 and 9 Part 1

Title: From Another World
Author: EclipsePheniox
Media: Video Game
Topic:  Mass Effect / Parallel Realities
Genre: Supernatural/Romance/AU
URL: From Another World Chapter 8 and Chapter 9
Critiqued by Erttheking

Well, it’s getting easier for me to breath again, so hopefully this will come up on time.  Now then, the last chapter ended with Ash and Shepard confessing their love for each other, so I imagine that the next chapter will have a slow and rather sensual start that will-

The last of the Batarian forces fell as Shepard, Tali and Ash made their way to the back of the plaza. The plasma torches were put out removing the immediate threat of Terra Nova’s destruction. Along the way to this centre hub Shepard’s group ran into Balak’s second-in-command. He was subdued and left in the facility. Saying, ‘this was just supposed to be another slave grab,’ did not gain any sympathy with Shepard.

 ….or not.

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437: From Another World – Chapter 6

Title: From Another World
Author: EclipsePheniox
Media: Video Game
Topic:  Mass Effect / Parallel Realities
Genre: Supernatural/Romance/AU
URL: From Another World Chapter 6
Critiqued by Erttheking

Chapter 6: True Identity

Starting chapter six and ohhhhhh boy these chapters are starting to get long.  Anyway, we start off on the Presidium.

 Shepard, Ashley and Kadian looked at the Presidium. Admiring the view from ambassador Udina’s office. Shepard had been to the Citadel twice with his foster parent’s. The place was impressive.

 Uh…thank you…for that…vital info.

 His mind wondered as he thought of the walk over to the embassy. Eyes where on him and giggling from teenage girls. All he did was smile back at them.

This kind of thing would make Ashley jealous but this time it didn’t. Her mind was wondering what John was going to say. She thought she knew him but all of that has know changed. After he woke up he seemed distant not talking like usual. She needed to find the right time to talk to him and find the truth.

Ah Christ, you’re going down the adoring fan route?  That is annoying and contributes nothing to the story, end of discussion.

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