Hello once more, wonderous Patrons!
In the last pile of ponderous nothing I laid before you, not much happened. There was more conversation between Edward, Carlisle, and Rose – now with the added “excitement” of Anna-Bella, who probably still has no idea what’s going on. There was then a mid-chapter jump over to James (Transitions? What are those?) who impulsively decided to rummage through the attic and pulled out a few fragments of Edward’s back story that I’m still having trouble believing. There was then yet another unexplained hop over to Jack, where the Magic Alice Ball predicted an attack by Alaskan “wolfs”, prompting the clan of supernaturally strong sparklepires (who have plenty of time to set up a defense and nearly unlimited resources to throw into the project) to run away like scared children.
If the fic follows formula, this chapter will either pick up exactly where the last one ended, or there will be a sudden and unexplained scene shift to another location and/or character.
Title: Their Mockingjay
Topic: The Hunger Games
URL: Their Mockingjay
Critiqued by Herr Wozzeck
Hello ladies and gentlemen, and welcome back to the Library. Well, what would you know, but my first Hunger Games fic here at the library is in fact a oneshot. Who figured?
And yes, I like the Hunger Games books. Do they have things that don’t work? Sure. But the things that do work far outweigh those that don’t, and I like how Katniss is as a character, being strong and independent but also having her insecurities. I quite like the character of Katniss Everdeen, as she actually is a fairly well-written female character.
So it kind of annoys me when people totally miss the characterization she has in the books. As this fic does. Well, aside from one other pretty big thing, anyhow.
With that said, let’s get started.
Title: A conservation between Hagrid and Dumbledore
Topic: Harry Potter
Genre: It’s listed as Drama/Hurt/Comfort. I’m…slightly skeptical, but we’ll let it pass.
URL: A conservation between Hagrid and Dumbledore
Critiqued by DawnFire
Hi, guys! I’m DawnFire. Some of you may have noticed me posting comments on here recently; some of you have even replied, which has been fun. I’m one of several (many?) PPC Boarders who seem to have made their way over here. I’m not sure whether all of us owe thanks to HerrWozzeck for posting a link on the Board, or whether some of us were already here, but I’ll say it anyway: thanks, Herr!
Welcome once more, dear Patrons, to another chapter of Twilight/Titanic … stuff.
In the last chapter the audience was treated to a brief glimpse into the head of James, Edward’s doppelgänger who just happens to be his grandson and the stepbrother of Rose’s ex-fiance. It was the typical “I’m not one of you!” sort of stuff, and not very memorable. The narration abruptly switched from first-person to third-person (because reasons, I guess) and then skipped over to where Rose was having awkward conversation with Edward and Carlisle in her apartment. Edward pumps her for information about James, but she tells them about James’ father instead. She then somehow deduces that they are “Vampires” even though they haven’t done anything that would cause her to suspect that they are somehow otherworldly and then tricks Carlisle into confirming this by spinning a little story about how her father was killed in the woods and she was saved by a wolf. They then reveal that Jack is a sparklepire now, causing Rose to faint just as a dark-haired woman opens the door.
Now, on to the chapter!
I’m back with another chapter of disaster, dear Patrons. Before we move on to the next chapter, let’s go over the highlights from our last dip into failure’s fondue pot.
There was that irritating Author’s Note that finally informed the audience that this AU fic is – surprise, surprise – an AU fic. Edward and Carlisle arrived in New York, Edward ran off after some guy who looked like him that he saw at the train station and Carlisle headed to the office of a doctor he knows who tended to some of the survivors. There was a rather pointless scene where Edward, who is still following the guy from the station, runs into the cafe where Anna-Bella (who is now officially Bella) works, sits for a minute, and then leaves. Carlisle finds out that Rose is pregnant and then runs into her as he is leaving the doctor’s office. She freaks out and takes off, but he easily catches her and they have a heart-to-heart in a park. Edward arrives at the park somehow and Rose mistakes him for someone named James, who is likely the lookalike he was following earlier.
The chapter begins with yet another Author’s Note, this one informing the audience that there are no Volturi in the fic. I don’t know why the audience is being informed of this now; so far there haven’t been any penguins in the fic either and that fact hasn’t rated a pointless Author’s Note.
Clearly the author is an anti-penguinite.