284: When you love someone – Chapter Four, Part Three

Title: When you love someone
Author: hot-chick down under
Media: Television
Topic: House M.D.
Genre: Drama/Romance
URL: When you love someone – Chapter Four
Critiqued by Frozenpoodlemeat

So, are you prepared for the amazing ending of this story?  No, me neither.  And I can promise that it’s not going anywhere interesting, nor is there going to be any sort of actual ending.  It seems the author just got bored and left after this chapter.  So it goes.

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278: When you love someone – Chapter Four, Part Two

Title: When you love someone
Author: hot-chick down under
Media: Television
Topic: House M.D.
Genre: Drama/Romance
URL: When you love someone – Chapter Four
Critiqued by Frozenpoodlemeat

We’re closing in on the end of this story and have maybe two parts left to go depending on how many snarky comments I have to make.  I’ll invite you all to make some predictions as to how this will end.  Anyway, we last left Trisha as she drifted off to sleep while curled up with a bottle of booze she did not drink.

The next morning after breakfast was done and the daily report came through, Chase went to work, Trisha did her usual street patrol and after that was done she drove Cameron to work and went in with her.

So, I wonder how long it takes Trisha to do her street patrol if she did it between breakfast and taking Cameron to work.  I’d assume Cameron is working first shift, but maybe not.

“Dr Cameron can I see you for a moment?” called Cuddy

“Yeah sure”

And the respect that Cameron feels for Cuddy is painfully obvious; she feels none.

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272: When you love someone – Chapter Four, Part One

Title: When you love someone
Author: hot-chick down under
Media: Television
Topic: House M.D.
Genre: Drama/Romance
URL: When you love someone – Chapter Four
Critiqued by Frozenpoodlemeat

Well, we’ve finally made it to the last chapter.  I know I’m looking forward to getting this mess all wrapped up.  Actually, I have a feeling that the author isn’t going to wrap anything up and this is probably the last chapter as the author just gave up on this stinker of a story.  Sometimes I’m a little sad when I’m reading a fanfic and it just ends, but in this case, I think I’ll get over it.  This chapter is called, “Let me be your wings”.  God only knows what that’s all about.

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266: When you love someone – Chapter Three, Part Four

Title: When you love someone
Author: hot-chick down under
Media: Television
Topic: House M.D.
Genre: Drama/Romance
URL: When you love someone – Chapter Three
Critiqued by Frozenpoodlemeat

And now, the exciting conclusion of chapter three, but I must warn you that there is going to be a song near the end.  Just so you can prepare yourself for that.

Wilson then quickly grabbed his coat, ran down to the entrance door, jumped into his car and went off to Cuddy’s to give it another shot. Trisha with a smile on her face, slowly talked into her earpiece that she had hidden in her ear.

I’m just going to roll my eyes at the ridiculousness of this situation being all covert special ops.

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260: When you love someone – Chapter Three, Part Three

Title: When you love someone
Author: hot-chick down under
Media: Television
Topic: House M.D.
Genre: Drama/Romance
URL: When you love someone – Chapter Three
Critiqued by Frozenpoodlemeat

Well, it looks like Trisha is going to stick her nose in and try to fix everyone’s problems.  She is a Mary-Sue, so I guess it is her job to make the world a happy and perfect place for all lesser beings

Trisha stepped into the hospital only to be greeted with stares and smiles, people admired this woman, they knew all about her and most of them applauded her for her quick thinking. This however did not please Trisha, not one little bit. She hated being the centre of attention. Wilson then bumped into Trisha.

Trisha loves being the center of attention and we all know it.

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