Title: A Jedi’s Destiny: Episode I: Rise of the Sith
Topic: Star Wars / Land Before Time
Genre: Sci Fi / Adventure
URL: A Jedi’s Destiny: Episode I: Rise of the Sith – Chapter 2
Critiqued by TacoMagic
Welcome back to the second half of chapter 2 of A Jedi’s Destiny.
Last time we were introduced to our main protagonist Markus. He’s a murdering Teeny-Stu who can book impossible flights at the last minute and avoid airport security with the cunning use of Hollywood physics. In the first half of the chapter, Markus destroys some research data/plans/whatever at a poorly-designed top-secret US Army research facility and then makes an improbable getaway made possibly only through inept security. He catches a flight to London and goes up to what is presumably his apartment. We join Markus already on location in his boring apartment room.
Markus tossed the suitcase on bed, preferring not to set it on the already-cluttered desktop. Markus stepped over and sifted through the pile on the desk, stacking together books, videogames, movies, trying to make some room for his computer’s monitor and keyboard. Markus smirked, his expression almost sad as he beheld a full bottle labelled “Corona”.
Oh-em-gee! He’s 16 and drinking crappy beer! What a rebel! Seriously, most teens in England are drinking good beer, so he’s really going against the flow here. And I can relate to his sadness at beholding the full bottle: I’d be pretty sad too if the only beer I had handy was a warm bottle of Corona.