268: A Jedi’s Destiny: Episode I: Rise of the Sith – Chapter One

Title: A Jedi’s Destiny: Episode I: Rise of the Sith
Author: Jedi472
Media: Movie
Topic: Star Wars / Land Before Time
Genre: Sci Fi / Adventure
URL: A Jedi’s Destiny: Episode I: Rise of the Sith – Chapter 1
Critiqued by TacoMagic

This week marks the start of another rather long project, a Star Wars / Land Before Time crossover. Unlike my other crossover, this one is actually rather good on mechanics. Not a lot of spelling mistakes, and there are commas, so my eyes won’t start bleeding just from reading this thing. That’s about the extent of the positive things I can say about this fic.

As we move into this fic, I’m going to run a little crash course for all of our readers on how to quickly spot a train-wreck fic, even if the mechanics are good. Let’s start with the summary:

When Littlefoot and the gang meet a teen-turned- Jedi, they are unknowingly thrust into an epic struggle in a galaxy far, far, away…Please review!Rated T CURRENTLY UNDERGOING REWRITE Chapters 1-6 rewritten as of 10/25/09, more soon!

OK, I admit that I’m being easy on you guys with this one. There are many obvious tells in this summary, the first of which is that it isn’t all summary. We also have subtle hints at a Gary Stu and begging for reviews. That alone isn’t enough though, so lets head on into the fic and see what we have waiting for us.

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