Title: A burning Rose
Author: daseylover14
Media: Book / Movie
Topic: Twilight
Genre: AU / Crime / Adventure
URL: A burning Rose – Chapter Three… or Four
Critiqued by Ghostcat

Howdy, my fine Patrons! We are nearing the halfway point for A burning Rose, so let’s jump right in with a summary.

Our fearless thief AburningRose, or AbR, used a pocket-sized pair of wings to reach the roof of either a bank or a museum. She stumbles upon an open vent in a duct that serves no purpose but to allow her access to the room where her assigned targets, the “blue saphire-collection,” are being kept in poorly-designed glass display cases. After foiling the sophisticated security systems with such mundane items as hairspray, a Polaroid camera, and her own breath, AbR steals the blue saphire-collection (which somehow turned into diamonds) and leaves behind a note and her signature burning roses. She returns to the roof and waits for a security guard/police officer to show up she she can toss him another burning flower and note before using her unique collapsible wings to glide off the roof, presumably into the waiting arms of a police helicopter.

The chapter, which is either Chapter 4 or Chapter 3, begins with what I am going to assume is an Author’s Note even though it is not indicated as such; given that the narration is mostly in the first-person it’s hard to tell when the AN ends and the narration begins, especially since the AN note ends with something the author forgot to include in the previous chapter.

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