185: Good Girl Bad attitude – Chapter Four, Part One

Title: Good Girl Bad attitude
Author: hot-chick down under
Media: Television
Topic: House M.D.
Genre: Adventure/Romance
URL: Good Girl Bad attitude: Chapter Four
Critiqued by Frozenpoodlemeat

I’m sure you’re all very excited to see Serenity’s bedside manner, so here is the beginning of chapter four, which is called ‘You’re shit out of luck’.  I’m amazed that she used ‘you’re’ correctly.

Here is the next chapter, hope you like it, feel free to comment and extend your ideas.

There’s a reason why she’s not blending in and it’s part of the plotline.

Well, I’m pretty sure that I won’t like it, but that isn’t going to stop the author from keeping this tripe available to all and sundry on the internet.  The reason Serenity doesn’t blend in is because she’s a Mary Sue to the nth degree.  Sues don’t fit in, they steal the show and make the other characters cry.  They can’t help it, they’re just made that way.

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