70: Flight 815 / All My Secrets Away – Chapter Twelve

Title: Flight 815 / All My Secrets Away
Author: LostLover22
Media: Television
Topic:  Lost
Genre: Adventure/Romance is the listing
URL:Flight 815: Chapter Twelve
Critiqued by Indy

It is with heavy heart that I bring you yet another chapter in the story of Dawn of the Island.  I know you’re all livid with joy.   I went to Fanfiction.net as usual to find the next chapter and the story was gone!  Well, sadly not.  The author just changed the title to “All My Secrets Away.”  Different title, same story.

You will remember in the last chapter that Sayid had gone missing, which concerned Dawn greatly (not that she would admit it to anyone other than the reader).  So, you won’t be surprised that at the beginning of this chapter, Dawn is worrying about Sayid.  She, however, comes to the conclusion that she can’t do anything to help him, so she’ll just wait and hope he shows up.  Also, there is a lot of tense changing in the writing.

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