15: Flight 815 – Chapter Two

Title: Flight 815
Author: LostLover22
Media: Television
Topic:  Lost
Genre: Adventure/Romance is the listing
URL: Flight 815: Chapter Two
Critiqued by Indy

So we once again join our Mary Sue, Dawn.  If you will remember, she has just taken 4 sleeping pills.  Then she drank an unknown amount of tequila (mmm tequila).  And if that were not enough to knock her out cold, she actually takes a blow to the head and is knocked out.

In chapter 2, Dawn awakens to Shannon’s screaming and what I can only imagine is the most mind-numbing headache known to man.  She must have had a ton of tequila because she thinks she is having a hangover.  At this point, I’m thinking that the Lost passengers really did die and the island is some sort of hell.  I’m no doctor, but all the pills and drinking and head injury would probably have killed her.  Maybe she’s the Rasputin of this story, or maybe she’s just a Mary Sue.

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